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By : Ssserpensssotia

From ANON - nia on June 11, 2008
this story rocks!
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From Nerys on May 13, 2008
Cries out loud, because ... the promised smut to chapter 16 is still not here.
What should I do now? I need a moment of relaxation from all that heavy duty bittersweet writing, which a bit of colors smut would provide me with just fine. But alas.... Serpie is probably hiding in her scaly *dun dun dun* in her Goblin-made-glass CoS again. I am thinking of asking our Lord to do something about the lack of smut he is experiencing. Yesssssss. That soundssss like a terrific idea.

Go team Dark Lord!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!!!!
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From Nerys on April 15, 2008
AHA!! Serpie, you know who this is...
I've just nicked Nerys' laptop and are using her name to type a message at this ridiculous muggle invention undisturbed.
Now... we need to talk about the lack of updates in this fic. I am NOT happy about that. And you know what happens when I am not happy.
No, not the pills going missing... daft woman. The other bit.
Yes, indeed... 13,5 inch long, yew wood, phoenix feather core... that's it, dear. You're catching on fast, aren't you?
Now, as for some suggestions about the next colors chapter, I clearly feel something needs to be done about Hermione's insolent behavior. I never, EVER allow people to make me look like a fool and I also think that insipid bird would make a terrific lunch for Nagini.
Speaking of animals, I am off. I need to 'explain' to Nerys that her love for doggies doesn't necessarily mean I am interested in four legged creatures who say whuf. Stupid Muggle women who write stories about me. ARGH!!!
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From Nerys on April 13, 2008
HI,

I just can't get enough of this chapter. It is so, SO funny to read about a Hermione who doesn't turn into a beauty queen for a change, but deliberately dresses up to look as ridiculous as possible to spoil things for Riddle. ROFL. Oh gosh, she is so in trouble now. Muahahahhhahaaa!! I think his response will be (cough) 'interesting' (cough).

I also adored the snowwhite, fairytale princess start of this chapter. Though with you as the author, I get the feeling I should be thinking Shrek instead. LOL.

So he is isolating her and she is letting him. Hmmm... big mistake Hermione. That way you give him too great an advantage. He already has a huge one, and he is not to be trusted. Remember who you made a deal with. grrrr... Yes, mr. Paranoia... LOL.

Sure, move into her room, because Dumbledore may be trying to screw things up for you or because there is nobody to do the cleaning anymore. That is the lamest excuse to move into a girl's room I ever heard, Riddle, I would have expected something a bit more cunning from the most evil, powerful wizard of all time. Pfftt... my mistake. Nerys huffs haughtily. (No, she is not, I repeat NOT, jealous of Hermione at all).

Yes, DD is hiding in there!!!!!!!! You kill me with these sentences, Serpie, you really do kill me. (Though I think DD would not prefer Hermione from the two... snickers... ROFL, because she is envision where DD would be hiding inside of Tom then. Muahhahaahhahhaaa!!!) Oh gosh, I think I better find a good hiding place now. glances across her living room anxiously for certain Dark Lords.

"DUMBL!!!! Okay, who named the bird?!! Explain it now, Serpie, immidiately..." the Dark Lord says menacingly.
"I know, my Lord, I know," Nerys says excitedly. "It had to be Serpie, master, she writes the fic, she names the bird."
"Excellent deduction, Nerys," the Dark Lord replies and he glares at Serpie, while twirling his wand between his spidery fingers. "Now, what shall I do with you."
"Imperio! My Lord!" Nerys suggests happily. "So she has to UPDATE ASAP!!!!"
"Another wonderful suggestion, Nerys, you are well underway of becoming my favourite Death Eater."
Nerys looks very smug and sticks out tongue to Serpie (but then she remembers she has to update bittersweet soon... and she remembers what is in the next chapter already... YIKES!!!!!!!!!!!!)

And I adored the interactions between the Parrot and the Snake. I loved how Tom immidiately decided Hermione was the Parrot, of course. Rolls eyes.

And can I just say I love how you build up the tension towards whatever it is you reveal in every chapter. I adore those little clues and stuff.
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From AnnaValerious on April 12, 2008
OOOOOO!!!! I luv this chappy!!! Is Tom really serious? :O Mione sounds so pretty! I can't wait for the next chappy!
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From joeshmo on April 12, 2008
great story! I love it!! I'm a little confused though, is hermione really really pretty? or really ugly? I couldn't figure it out...
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From Nerys on March 30, 2008
Okay, I know it is not exactly the idea of reviewing someone else
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From theeloquentquill on March 28, 2008
Ok, I just read some of the other people's reviews and more chapters and all that... and now I feel like a jerk. I wasnt aware that english wasn't your first language. I still stand by what I said in my last comment, but depending upon how long you have been taking english, it may be a little too harsh? I'm not sure, but if I offended in anyway, I am deeply sorry.

Yours in Eloquence
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From theeloquentquill on March 28, 2008
There is a english rule that has helped me grandly in my developement as a writer. And is simply to "get rid of all unnecessary fluff." -to put it so eloquently. And in this story, I feel there is a need for that. While I love the ideas and plot to this story, it would be so much better if you let the reader a little freedom and room to think for themselves. Allow the reader to put the pieces of the puzzle together instead of you just laying it all out BOOM! in our face.
For instance, instead of saying "What?! Me shag you after I just met you..... etc etc..." say something like, "... She cocked her head to the side and gave him a look of great incredulity. 'You have lost your mind.'" (or a witty line that would be more a part of Hermione's character.)
And instead of making the personal thoughts all long and drawn out to the point where they are almost cliche, just something simple. Like instead of saying:'I knew she's be quick to fall just like the rest. It's so easy with these stupid girls, I wonder why I even thought this one would give some fight. No matter, I'll still get great pleasure in breaking her. Just hope she isn't another limp fish like that last girl.' Say: 'Pity. She is just like the rest. Stupid and easy.'
I am not trying to be a jerk, and it is just my oppinion. I know my advice was not asked for, and you may not want it, but I would rather someone leave me a comment that helped me grow as a author rather than "oh thats great!" and it not really be great, ya know? But anyways, I do like this story, and I will keep reading. Good luck,

Yours in Eloquence
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From LadyVoldemort87 on March 18, 2008
Naughty Tom, yet so good! As i sit here munching on my kit kat, i am dreaming of Tom doing slightly similar things to me...oh i love being his Dark Lady ... Great chapter! x x
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From AnnaValerious on March 17, 2008
Yay for smutness!!!! ;D
I think Mione is going to regret making that deal. Buttt oh lucky girl she gets to be with Tommy! XD
Can't wait for more chappys!
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From Nerys on March 17, 2008
YES! YES!! YES!!! Me wanting cookie from Tom.. PLEASE!!! begs on all fours herself.

"A/N This chapter is for all those people that believe in Tom Riddle
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From Pookah on March 03, 2008
strange & mysterious beginning. one nit pick- in the 1940s, when Tom Riddle was head boy, no one was called 'Ms.' A student would have been called 'Miss,' just as JKR uses 'Miss' in the books that take place 50 years later.

In the 1940s, it would be 'Miss X' for an unmarried lady and 'Mrs. X' for a married lady, a VERY few ladies kept their maiden names and sometimes those went by Miss X,

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From ANON - mariteri on March 01, 2008
The story is going great! Certainly there are mistakes, but nothing that can't be overlooked or corrected at a later time when you finally get a beta reader. Excellent writing and I do hope you update soon!
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From Nerys on February 28, 2008
"You should have known better, Hermione. I always win. And you, my darling, are going to help me." - I like your new summary. A LOT!

Ooh, I inspired a chapter. YAY!!! Me happy.
Especially a chapter that is so wonderfully evil and vicious. sneezes in handkerchief... again.

Oh, you must update fast! I want to know what happens next. With the Veritaserum... and the sitting in her bedroom!! with Nagini... YAY!!! Smut central!!! PLEASE!!!! Begs, kisses hem of robes...
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