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By : twocanz

From SalonKitty on August 02, 2008
Hey, the forum cut off half my post! Damn, I had another paragraph worth of praise and speculation. Anyway, the response...
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From SalonKitty on August 02, 2008
Oh My Gawwwd, I love you! For many reasons, but mostly in this chapter. I have to review "Accepting Untruths" before I can go any further, because it deserves a heap of happy happy joy joy.

First off, Hallelulujah! You've re-introduced the Ravenclaw back to her rational mind with a vengeance! She was so...so...calm, and patient, and, questioning, and,and...reasonable! during that long, overdue talk with Harry on Hagrid's doorstep. There was no hiding behind reason anymore. Reason packed up and went home for the holiday break. I just guffawed over this line when I read it prior to the above scene. Not only for the sardonic humor, but its sheer nerve. But then you went and made it all ironic by the conclusion of this chapter.

Secondly, thanks for reminding me that we're in a story about a kid named Harry Potter, the one who's got a psycho that's after him. With just the mention of "Dark Tower", it suddenly occurred to me that Harry in a struggle for his very soul and sanity is nothing new to him, and that whatever demons he's been working out with Cho could never have eclipsed that remaining force of evil that's been attempting to seep into his mind from day one. Namely, one cold dude with a bit of a snake fetish. Harry not admitting to Cho that he's in love with her is weaved from that same spool of worry that broke Harry and Ginny up in HBP. Whatever transpired in those moments he had in battle, surely he's run the risk of coming even closer to Voldemort's probing consciousness? Even Dumbledore must be implicated in all of this, since it's his "lessons" showing Harry, unknowingly, just how much the two are alike. Hell, Voldemort's sinister link could even be the driving force behind Harry's mental breakdown at the beginning of this whole ordeal. I don't think you are making it that simple, of course, but all this time I've sort of forgotten that Harry's still caught up in this sordid tale of Tom Riddle and you've never implied that his obtrusive nightmares and "eye" to the monster's actions have ever been suspended. I had often wondered how Cho would have reacted to one of Harry's disturbingly prophetic dreams if he were to have one while in her bed. But then again, Harry never gets to sleep around her for long.

In Harry's argument, by pointing out to her that she's the one who's had the control in their relationship since his feelings for her changed, he's inadvertently spotlighted his vulnerability. Cho could only have the upper hand, if Harry cared about her reactions to everything he did. So, he says a lot even as he avoids expressing...certain...sentiments. It seems like he's seeing some reason finally, too. He understands enough from their history together, to realize he's not going to ever have her love in return, that she CAN'T want him in return, if he can't give her the power he took from her back. He may be overcompensating with the May-I's, but they are necessary for her healing process, and he's giving her due course. He's acting the way he should have last year, when their attraction was less complicated and more innocent. Anyway, I absolutely loved this response...
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From ANON - vivi on August 02, 2008
Harry and Cho are soo cute and lovely together , and tis fanfiction is fabulous.
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From ANON - vivi on August 02, 2008
this history is amazing , poor cho she love harry but i think harry love her too , i want he leaves ginny for cho , because he didn't love her.
I hope you continue very soon .. please i'm a big fan of cho and harry paring!
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From ANON - timelord on August 01, 2008
What is Cho sorry for exactly? And when can we expect to see an update?
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From ANON - DHsucks on July 31, 2008
following you pattern, I expect Harry to start acting like a real sleaze again in the next chapter.
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From SalonKitty on July 31, 2008
In "Pain Reliever", after Cho demands that he dispense with calling her "Love", he stumbles over the endearment, using variations of Lov-Cho, Lo-Cho, L-Cho, and L-L-Cho, 27 times over a two day period. You could have used that device 3 or 4 times, and we would have gotten the fact that he's having a hard time just saying her name again. Sometimes, less is more, and a little restraint goes a long way. Don't bludgeon your audience by beating them over the head with a baseball bat.
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From ANON - jake on July 31, 2008
YOU!!!!! You sneaky little author! I was walking downstairs minding my own business when something occurred to me when you mentioned Hagrid's hut in the last chapter. That time they told each other that they loved well each other actually happened didn't it? Harry lied to her. That explains why he is so hellbent on letting her know he can't live without her. I bet that is it or something to that effect.
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From ANON - jake on July 31, 2008
Grrr, you fooled me you did! I thought he was saying he was sorry because he was leaving with Dumbledore. Now, that would have been exciting!
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From SalonKitty on July 30, 2008
Man! The sad psychotic tale of Harry and Cho is exhausting me! Yup, some serious folie
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From ANON - jake on July 30, 2008
Good chapter. I must say I can't wait for more....This is my second time reviewing it because I pushed the wrong button and lost my previous review. I was rather happy you liked the note thing. So many guys are jerks these days methinks. I mean slipping your girlfriend (or wife) a note like that every once in awhile is a good thing especially if she is going to have a bad day as it tends to turn the worst days into surprisingly awesome days like if she where to stick her hand into her pocket during a boring meeting and find that note. At least my old girlfriend seemed to like stuff like that when I did it then again she cheated on me and broke up with me when we weren't even fighting and since she is my only girlfriend to date I can't claim to know a lot. I guess since we were in our first year of college she thought it would be nice to experience lots of different guys (or so I've heard) instead of staying with me. We had been together since high school so it sort of came out of nowhere. I feel kind of weird having said that now....This is what happens when some people (softobsidian74) don't update their story's (and by that I mean A Dubious Affair). Not really, I'm just in a pissy mood today because I saw her and by her I mean whore). -___-
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From ANON - DHsucks on July 30, 2008
Another question I have is how much does Dumbles know. He should have a fairly good idea of what Harry's motivation for attacking McClaggen was, and he probably has some suspicion of why Cho "requested" to stay. Then again, in cannon, he never cared for the safety of his students, and the only book in the series where he would have been unable to either prevent or reduce the danger was book 3 (he didn't have any choice about the dementors).
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From ANON - DHsucks on July 30, 2008
So, after that display in the great hall, as well as Harry's general lack of subtlety, I have to assume that Hermione has figured out that there is something going on between him and Cho. She's much smarter than the girl who's sole driving goal in life was to wrap her legs around the boy-who-lived.
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From SalonKitty on July 30, 2008
twocanz, whenever you have the urge to write "passed", put in past, instead, and vice versa. You continually mix up the two words. Passed is the past tense of "to pass", as in crossing space, I passed her in the hall, she passed me the butter or he passed the class with flying colors. Past, however, is referring to time gone by, or beyond a space, it's past the house on the left or she longed for the past, memories of her and Harry gripped in an unwavering embrace. Hope that helps.

So, sick bastard that I am, I'm sort of thrilled at the idea of Cho being alone with Harry in the castle for eleven days. I am, however, a little worried about the integrity of the headmaster, since we know full well he is aware of the teenagers' passions, if not the extent and circumstances. Also, I'm as convinced as Cho that the Gryffindors really are a bunch of bleeding idiots. I expect RON to not have a clue about his best mate's change of feelings for the Ravenclaw girl, because he's as dense as the Forbidden Forest, but it appears the rest of the House are just as oblivious to Harry's bold stares of longing, his clutching of Cho at the party, or why his rage is directed at Cormac. I sort of figured that McLaggen and Ginny have had some indiscretions by now, but I wonder if the news had even registered with Harry when it was uttered by the seventh year. I suppose that's helped to have Ginny a little preoccupied so she's not been noticing her boyfriend's current inclinations during meals in the Great Hall.

When Cho wonders what potentially might happen if she had the balls to just kiss Harry in a room full of people, especially in front of his Gryffindor Princess, I had to laugh because I'd thought of the same thing. Every time Terry turned incredulous at how blatant Harry was being around the rest of the school, I wished Cho had blazingly waltzed over to the disturbed one's table, plopped her hands down between his while leaning far over into his personal space, and huskily asking him "was there something you needed from me?", and waited for the fireworks to explode. Of course, Harry wouldn't be able to resist. All those fantasies she used to have about him taking her on the table in front of all their classmates and the staff would have most likely become a reality. I'm glad to see we're still on the same wavelength in most areas, twocanz.

Slughorn's party was intense, but this---The red, green, and wild gaze that was boring into her, turned briefly up toward the ceiling.
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From SalonKitty on July 30, 2008
Yes, Jake is correct. We didn't get "Crumbling", but another helping of "Why Don't You Want Me?", so I hope you can fix it by tomorrow.

Well....*clears throat*...so, uh, thanks for taking the time to answer all my demanding queries as best as you were able. I appreciated that. I can see what you were trying to set-up with that chapter, and I do understand some of your reasoning, but it was still jarring, nonetheless. It's not a stretch of the imagination to see Harry having a relapse in his psychosis, but in the context of the story, the actions seemed incongruous to the previous chapters. From a purely structural point of view, I didn't think those scenes worked as well in the flow of the narrative. It's hard to see that, sometimes, when you're so deep in your own ideas of what you're trying to convey, so I honestly was trying to give you the benefit of another pair of eyes to sharpen up the writing. I realize that a character's motivations won't always be so obvious to the reader when you're building suspense and trying to create anticipation in the reader. Harry can be a frustrating figure, because he's so mercurial and unstable, and we aren't privy to his POV any longer. Seeing him through the eyes of Cho can be just as maddening. There's scenes I'd love to see happen, but since she can't be there to witness them, I have to imagine them in some alternate version of their story. Harry speaking to Hermione was a perfect example. Just when we thought we might discover something Harry's been holding back, we lose that tether. I'm thankful we got the glimpse that we did, however, since I really needed to see Harry get some comfort from his friends. At certain points of the fic, I've made up my own scene of Harry breaking down to Ron how he'd fallen for Cho, but his confession to Hermione that he feared he's lost Ron already, along with his mate's sister, suddenly made me realize how much Harry stands to lose with the entire Weasley clan. But Ron would have provided little help, anyway. And sometimes, as you pointed out, Ron's jealousy of his best friend still sparks a few flames. Besides, Hermione is the one who would be able to best advise Harry in this dilemma, particularly if she's getting the edited version of events. I don't know how Hermione would feel to hear Harry's real confession. Somehow, I think she'd still stand by him, but she'd try and find him some professional help, for sure. Yes, Hermione understands Cho. She'd see things between them for how they really are.

As for Cho's sidekick, I really, really love Terry the way you've portrayed him. His words to Cho about the state of the miserable Gryffindor being more than just hungry for sex is at least giving her the option to hear another perspective on the matter and get out of the madness of her current headspace. She could really use that objectivity right now. I loved the fact that you have Harry following Terry around to slyly glean some information on his lovely. And speaking of Harry, his upbeat, giggling persona that accompanied Cho to her tower was unsettling to me, too. Chilling, more like it, I had goosebumps on my arms. If the Ravenclaw student is having such a hard go with her teachers this term, how on earth are Dumbledore and Co. not noticing Harry hanging onto his last lick of sanity by a very, very, gossamer thin thread? But then, they were pretty oblivious in the books, too, huh?

Anyway, twocanz, forgive my outrage earlier. I suppose you did rile me up a bit. I take my fiction pretty seriously. I've been in love with reading since I was 4 years old, so while I respect any literary pursuit, I certainly have a strong opinion on what makes a good story. I criticize with the sincerest of intentions. And once again, I appreciate your response. I feel much better after this chapter, as I can see some more pieces falling into place. I don't know if I totally agree with your assertion that I'm speaking for Cho in my reviews, while Jake sees Harry's side more clearly. I've always been an avid Harry supporter (OotP is my favorite in the series, fercryingout loud!) and he's the reason I adored the books so much. I feel pretty connected to him in many ways, so I usually take Harry's side, no matter how he's written in the story. Victim or villain, hero or not, straight or bi/gay, dark or compassionate, angry or deliriously happy, he's all good to me. :)

I liked this chapter.

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