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Reviews for Ultimate Betrayal

By : KaiDragon
  • From Slytherdor on October 19, 2008
    All I can think of to say is...
    More, More, More.
    Pretty Please?
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  • From alma on October 19, 2008
    good chapter.
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  • From hiyayaka on October 19, 2008
    what the hell? What happened to being equals? Not to mention harry is the consort not a common noble. Jengens should be the one scared and punished.
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  • From lazycrazykitten on October 19, 2008
    I personally thought what Aiden did to that man was hilarious!
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  • From ChaosgoddessKali on October 19, 2008
    So Narcissa is aware that Severus is not her true mate? why that witch anyways I so think trey should have gotten worse I dont care who he is he is a butthole. when is albus getting questioned?
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  • From Ladyroo88 on October 19, 2008
    I love it!!! I can't wait for more!
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  • From bumblebee on October 19, 2008
    ooohhh i wonder who severus is going to end up with. Narcissa or Tamara?
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  • From Jan on October 18, 2008
    Great story, but you have the bad habit for repeating "in addition, moreover, therefore" over and over through out your chapters, in one chapter I read in addition over twenty if not thirty times! I'm not trying to be a b****h, but I thought I should let you know, cause as one of your readers, this little thing has been getting to me, and maybe other readers of yours as well, I figured it's best to let you know before you lost readers over something as slight as this. *winks* Anyway back to my review, awesome, I love the fact that Severus' been claim as Tamara's, I mean I don't hate Narcissa, but she's just to clinging and needy! Can't wait for a D/C moment as well as Z/N *batting eyelashes suggestively*

    Please update chapter 39 soon ^_^

    Jan

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  • From danawarner on October 18, 2008
    Way to go Sev!
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  • From SassyThing on October 18, 2008
    Great story, I love what you have so far and I am always looking forward to new chapters. I have a few questions:

    1. Why is Neville not considered innocent of any charges?

    2. I think Tamara and Severus should be paired and axe that bitch Narcissa, what a stuck up bitch she is?


    3. When are we going to see more action with the other pairings other than Wyatt and Aiden?
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  • From llyoung on October 18, 2008
    I like Severus and Tamara together. thanks for the new chapters.
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  • From Ladyroo88 on October 18, 2008
    Ekk! I love it!! Paige and Phoebe got told!!!! I love it!!! More please!!!
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  • From julesquires on October 18, 2008
    No more till sunday evening? Wait...now I'm confused. If you get a chance, next chapter could you post up which country you live in so I can work out the time difference? Because at the moment, Sunday evening means in 26hours to me (that would take me to 6.30).

    Anyway, wonderful chapter. I liked the interaction between all the pairs. I can't wait to see how Zion and Neville's relationship progresses. Was it Tamara? Anyway, her and Severus...I saw that coming a while back and forgot about it. It's nice to see them together. Something has got to happen with Narcissa though, she's off - everything about her is off. Poor Wyatt missiong out there, he shouldn't have been suprised that Harry fell asleep though.

    Enjoy your busy weekend!
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  • From ChaosgoddessKali on October 18, 2008
    yay I love Aidan and Wyatt, and thank you so much for bringing back Tamara she is becoming an interesting character. I am wondering though if Narcissa is a magical creature shouldnt it be obvious by now she isnt Severus' mate and if so why is she still going after him? Does he have money or power that no one is aware of? Neville and Zion yay though Zion and the twins would have made an interesting image lol. The twins could probably keep Kai in line though haha but thats just my thoughts. I love reading your fic and I look forward to each and every update
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  • From on October 18, 2008
    Well, that was was a great set of chapters and I like that the twins are still in Harry's camp so to speck.

    I just love this story and can not wait for more!

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