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By : bubblybabs

From Elphaba on June 03, 2009
Holy cow that was a long chapter with a TON of information! And everything pulls together more now! GREAT GREAT chapter! Excellent job!
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From WesleyY7 on May 26, 2009
Hey! No fair blaming me for late updates! Your fans are going to hunt me down and lynch me. You'd feel pretty guilty if that happened, right? Right?!!!

Since I've read variations of this chapter a number of times, this review probably won't be too long. Well, too long for me anyway.

*I'm not a R/Hr shipper, but I am totally rooting for them in this story. I know it won't happen, but I find it funny that there are so many crazy pairings in this story, and for once I'm hoping for the canon one! Unless Draco comes back, of course. ;)

*Okay, I've enjoyed a lot of stuff in this story. A lot of crazy, out there, but still hot stuff. The scene when Hermione's mind drifts to her father while she's touching herself? Creepy. And very telling with how far gone she is. Thank you for not going into too much detail with that.

*I'm still trying to figure out the whole Hermione/Snape dynamic. She wasn't just afraid of him, but repulsed as well. He doesn't seem to harbor any feelings for her, yet he is oddly protective. Although, I was waiting for him to smack her in the hallway just to calm her down. I will continue to watch as this develops.

*Snape's "Just Fucking Great" diatribe amuses me to no end.

*I adore the Weasleys, so another big hug for the eldest son. Hi Bill!

*I will say I'm still curious as to how much the events that we know in Book 5 have been affected by all of this. I know most of the major stuff happens in June, but I am eager to read how all the big moments will unfold.

*Yay for passing 20,000 hits! Congrats!
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From Elphaba on May 26, 2009
poor Mione, Please let Bill help her!
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From apkblack on May 26, 2009
Okay, so maybe wizards don't quite get the muggle preoccupation with sustenance and jobs and responsibilities and all that, but my only quibble with the chapter is the Grangers' stress about their practice, etc., was laid on a little thick.

As usual, I particularly like the way you write conversations, interactions.

Am way too impatient for the story/plot to progress, so maybe that's why this reaction to the Grangers' understandable stress.

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From ANON - bobby on May 14, 2009
Hi, been reading your story on and off for a while, my first review - sorry

firstly you are an amazing author - your writing is well thought out & constructed, dialogue is good and you are very creative. I usually like dark/angsty stories with erotic domination scenes but I must admit I started finding it all too disturbing so in the end stopped reading as I felt it was damaging my inner psyche. I started seeing parallels to the fritzl case and it made me feel sick that I was reading this for entertainment. I only started reading again because I wanted to see the story ended and Hermione rescued. Which I am so thankful has hapened. I want sirius to suffer and suffer again and then Kreacher and all the other elves and then bella and the other DE. Maybe sirius could hunt them down and kill them, before going back to azkhaban. Please dont do anything more bad to hermione - let her heal. And I hope you write another story soon, though perhaps one less dark.
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From apkblack on May 09, 2009
So at some point is the elfin magic that got Remus into this going to wear off? And does Remus back off?
And where are all those Death Eaters who are surely wondering where she's gotten to? Not to mention Bellatrix? And Draco?

I know, this is a useless post, meant merely to bug you into writing faster ... the suspense is killing me.
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From ANON - AFTAlonzo on May 06, 2009
This is another excellent,lengthy chapter. I'm anxious to read about Hermione's decision on Sirius.
Also, I'd like to express that I'm sorry about the child you lost. I don't know what I would do if I had to go through with that.
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From apkblack on May 04, 2009
Well. That was unexpected, but now that it's done, I'm very glad that you did it. I remember thinking that the reunion with the parents was just a little too pat, but honestly wasn't so interested in it. Was impatient to get to more of the meat of the story, if you know what I mean.

But now that it's been rewritten, it's absolutely right there in the meat of the story, and it feels true.

Good job.

Hoping the next chapter will be coming soon .....
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From WesleyY7 on May 04, 2009
*"The part where Hermione is remembering Adara sucking on her fist should be credited to WesleyY7." Oh good God, woman! You're killing me here! Hmmm, Adara's death upset her and she kept flashing back to that sweet little scene. I know! I'll have the grieving mother remember the same moment to dig the nail in a little further!! :P

*I've felt that Sirius has been close to the breaking point, and I do believe he's almost cracked. The back and forth his emotions and thoughts, and his anger at Hermione is frightening. I know he's grieving and in denail, but it's still very scary. I don't want him anywhere near her.

*The poor Weasleys! I'm so glad that Ron and Ginny have been Obliviated. I think that will help them remain sane. Part of me wishes they would do the same with Hermione as well and explain Persimionne to her in some way. (Of course then she would never remember Adara.) And I still feel bad that Molly doesn't remember the birth. Here she is so concerned about Sirius, yet he was the one who took that memory away from her.

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From sbrande on May 03, 2009
Didn't you get my beta work where I said that this is wrong:

Hermione turned her head towards the familiar voice of her mother and quickly stood from the cot she was lying on, a momentary look of surprised joy spreading over her face, only to be quickly replaced by a look of sullen trepidation. She suddenly crossed her arms over her chest, put her head down, and slowly backed up until she was hiding behind Remus. Remus watched her with concern; her parents, confusion; Albus, a heavy heart; Severus, disgust, his eyes rolling.

Because Remus and Hermione were in the recliner chair, remamber!

Please let me know so I can send it too you again if you did not recieve it.

Love Sonia :)
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From apkblack on May 03, 2009
Okay, you've had enough time. UPDATE ALREADY.

Waiting for the Death Eater response to her liberation.

Please????
Pretty please?
With sugar on top?
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From sbrande on April 30, 2009
Oh baby, that felt so real for me. All the emotions. Albus fucken Dumbledore trying to sugar coat everything so that he comes out smelling of roses. Damn I hate that wizard.

I'm just not to sure whether Hermione would have run to her parents and embraced them, but hey, everyone takes stress differently.

I was wondering about this story the other day (and today before you emailed me to let me know that you put this ch up) and thought you must be busy with RL and all. Don't worry as I shall continue to follow you no matter how long it takes you to write this story. People just don't understand how much of your soul goes into writing a story like this, but believe you me I understand.

Anyway just wanted to let you know that you are doing a great job, and I wish you all the best on the toughest writing that is yet to come. I hope you are able to pull it off as it shall be interesting to say the least where you take it from here.

Love Sonia :)
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From Wistfu1Stargazer on April 26, 2009
ARGH! This is my second attempt to submit a review for this chapter. The first one got eaten by the site due to its going through its maintenance cycle. UGH!

RE: chapter thirty-one

Thank the gods that Albus and Severus have found a way to visit with Hermione and the babies, and eventual way to rescue them.

Mmmm, I love Hermione and Severus-Remus together. They (Hermione and Severus) have always been one of my favorite pairings. I also like Severus/Hermione/Remus relationships too--a very yummy combo! Anyways, getting back to the story, they were very sweet together and sexy too. I love his tender feelings towards her afterwards--sounds hopeful to me. I would love to read more of them together; more details wouldn't hurt either. Please?!
;~D

FREAKING Kreacher! If it hadn't've been for his threatening the babies, Hermione would never have had that particular night terror, and poor baby Adara may still be alive.

*::tears in eyes, and still feeling choked up::*
Poor Hermione is going to be devasted when she finds that one of her babies has died. Hopefully Severus and Remus will be able to help her though the grieving process.

Too bad it took the death of one of the babies to make it so they (Hermione and the babies) could be rescued.

Very well done--keep up the good work!
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From apkblack on April 26, 2009
Okay, so Lupin wants to stay. I like that. And appreciating how Dumbledore is letting him be as protective over her as he needs to be. Is that part of his healing, too? All sorts of therapy he'll need from this, too, right? He was also raped and abused.

I actually had a lot to say after first reading it before the weekend, but now have to reread to remember what it all was. Just wanted to fast say something to spur you on to write the next chapter faster. LOL

And BTW thanks for that link to that excellent and on-the-mark short story on ashwinder.
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From ANON - JayFortuna on April 24, 2009
Some great things in this chapter:

1. Oh, Sirius. He is this controversial-and-unable-to-think person again. When I was reading about Dumbledore bringing Adara to him, I jumped between these "good guy" and "bad guy" points of view. At first he blames Hermione, and this is bad. Then he realises she's not guilty, and this is good. Then he blames himself, but... He doesn't reach the most logical conclusion - that he shouldn't have started abusing Hermione (and there wouldn't be any nightmares at all in this case). He blames himself for not tying her to bed!!! I couldn't possibly think of such a thing - I guessed it would be just plain "good" or "bad" outcome! Yay Sirius, your lack of logic is back. I can't believe he doesn't even blame Bella for being the most likely cause of nightmares.

2. The result of Kreacher's interaction with Remus. Before now, everything looked like he had developed only a sexual attraction to Hermione. But when he started demanding to see her without actually listening to reason - "she is mine"... oh. He sounds just like Sirius. This was unexpected. I know he is great, and sweet, and understanding, but now I actually feel sad for Hermione, erm, interacting with him. Yup, she needs more sane people in her life, but they cannot be told everything to completely understand her.

3. Of course the rescue cannot solve all problems, but I suppose we readers thought something like "Oh, just let her be rescued and everything will somehow work out!" It seems like they have new problems within the Order - starting with the abovementioned Remus problem now that everything is out. I wonder if Kreacher expected it to happen in such case.

4. Dumbledore. I really like the fact that he is a "good" Dumbledore and not the manipulative-and-thinking-about-greater-good-only Dumbledore. Well, at least on the surface. It just makes me feel somewhat safe and hopeful while reading the story when somebody there behaves just as I suppose I would. There are more sane people, of course, but, for example, Snape... well, let's just say he's not a nice man. It will be great if Hermione stays with him (I absolutely love this pairing, by the way), but still...
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