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From cathyhester on April 05, 2009
Thank you for getting her out of that room!
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From ANON - soniab on April 05, 2009
Oh no, not Adara. You could have killed off the other one. Sirius will be devastated now where as Ron doesn't know he has a child (well he does, but doesn't remember)

This chapter made me cry. I can only guess at how Hermione will feel when told of the death (caused by her own hand) of her daughter. *SNIFF*

And yes, poor bloody Hermione in my story, LOL. It can only get better now that the collar is in place.

Thanks for the quick update.

Love Sonia :)
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From WesleyY7 on April 05, 2009
Chapter 30 - Not much more to say about what happened since I feel I was hard enough on you the first time I read this chapter. Still breaks my heart though. I still hate you.

What's interesting about this reread is that yes, it's bitter sweet, and she has been rescued, but there are so many questions not only left answered, but also introduced in this chapter alone.

*'Draco doesn't help with the rescue! However, he helps in other ways in later chapters' You have pleased me.

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From WesleyY7 on April 05, 2009
Since I already screamed and squeeed to you when I first read this chapter, this review won't be as lengthy as my usual ones.

*Bad stuff first - The fact that you made Hermione barren just breaks my heart. It really highlights how evil and sadistic Bellatrix is, yet poor, poor Hermione. She has so much else to come to terms with, and now this? My concern for her mental well being after this chapter just went up.

*Awesome stuff - Draco. I adore him in this chapter. I was worried Hermione would have a painful encounter with a vengeful bully from school. I like how even though we haven't seen him in this story beyond a brief mention, I saw a lot of character growth one chapter. From indifference at the beginning (sex with Granger was going to be such a chore) to a connection at the end (him being concerned about her pleasure and safety), I loved it! I'm sure it's a pipe dream, so in my AU of your AU Draco will be the one to rescue her in the end. And I just have to add, that first kiss was hot!

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From Visitkarte on April 04, 2009
Oh God, this is getting worse and worse. Now Hermione is barren, too. If she looses the babies, she'll go crazy! I liked Draco's attitude.
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From Wistfu1Stargazer on April 04, 2009
RE: chapter 30 and some of the previous ones too

*::hangs head in shame::*
Sorry about not having reviewed on a regular basis. I admit it, I can be a lazy wench and selfish too in not taking the time to inform the author of my opinions, suggestions, corrections needed, and pleasure gained from reading a story well done.

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I absolutely love Remus and Hermione together! He is so caring, gentle and passionate with her. She deserves that in a life partner/lover. I felt so sad for him when he regreted that one of the babies wasn't his. He would make an awesome father.

I'm hoping that with Sirius revealling all that he has it works as a type of therapy to help him and the others to get out from under Kretcher's influence. You know?

OMG! Bella is SUCH a complete and total BITCH to have made poor Hermione barren. Poor girl doesn't even have the option to be able to settle down someday and crank out kids with the man of her dreams (whoever that may turn out to be). I had tears in my eyes when I read that bit. To not be able to have children when she is ready to due to a sadistic and insane BITCH would be, I can imagine, heartbreaking for Hermione once she discovers what had been done to her. It horrified me to read of such cruelty of an act against anyone, especially Hermione after all that she has suffered through.

Mmm, Draco is truly a sexy young man after my own heart--lucky girl Hermione that he has taken an interest to make things pleasurable for her. Very erotic, exciting and well detailed too! I love how he is turning out to be a sympathic character that is caring for her well-being, was horrified by the atrocities commited against her, and was more concerned about her receiving pleasure before he, himself, had any.
;~D

VERY well done--keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to additional chapters.
:D
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From ANON - ninjamonkey26 on April 02, 2009
I know this may have been said before but I am a rabid h/hr fan (and can't really believe I've read this story for this long, a testament to your writing prowess to be sure)as such it hurts to see any and everyone using hr w/o harry at least getting a tiny piece even if its an imperiused role and draco as a nice guy = gag me with a spoon, and to have remus and dr as hr's basically only affectionate sexual encounters is a depressing point of this story for me.
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From ANON - ninjamonkey26 on April 02, 2009
The clitoris is not the exact anatomical equivalent to a male's penis in that a penis has more than one function, procreation being one and urination the other. The clitoris has thus far proven scientifically to be the only appendage on the human body (male/female) dedicated exclusively to pleasure. There literally has not been another function found for the clitoris beyond sexual stimulation.
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From Elphaba on April 02, 2009
OMG Poor 'Mione I feel for her! And finally Sirius thinks with his head, I mean brain!
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From cathyhester on April 02, 2009
Okay. On a personal note --- I forgot to ask on first review.

Why do some stories (and this chapter) come up at double the page width and others come up normal page width? Can anyone tell me how to correct this as I find it very annoying. Sorry for posting a 2nd review to ask but I keep forgetting and can't find any way to change this myself.
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From cathyhester on April 02, 2009
'For a brief moment, he was disgusted with himself when he wondered what his Aunt tasted like before another one of Hermione's moans snapped him back to the task at hand that lay before him.' Isn't this sentence kind of repetitive? Wouldn't either 'the task at hand' or 'what lay before him' work? But enough about sentence structure.

You're right about feeling better about Remus with this chapter.

I came into the story hating Draco and this chapter didn't help on that score.

I feel like the story is really slowing down. I almost fell asleep while reading the Draco section. Not sure if that's because I'm exhausted from pumping water out of my basement for the 3rd day in a row or because of the writing and my dislike of Draco.

Sirius and his attempts to 'keep' Hermoine are sad and really say a lot for Kreacher's mind control sessions.

Keep up the good work and please update soon. Am anxiously awaiting Hermoine's rescue.
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From apkblack on April 02, 2009
One other comment, about healing. I wonder if Sirius will be given a chance to heal in your story, too. Immature he may be, but he's been subject to mind-control and manipulated to an extreme degree, even to the point of insanity. He needs a healing, too. (Then again, that could just be because he's my soft spot. Well, okay, not in this story he's not, but as a general rule, that is.)
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From ANON - soniab on April 02, 2009
I don't know if you were referring to this chapter (at the beginning) or the next chapter however, I did not find this chapter difficult to read at all.

I liked the fact that Draco has a heart and that Albus and Severus have come up with a plan to rescue Hermione and her daughters. I really have to wonder if Hermione will stay with Sirius after all is said and done? Hmmm, it will e interesting to find out. Also, I would very much like to see how you handle her psychological healing as I have to go through that in my own story and although I know how I shall approach it, I am always interested in how other writers tackle a the subject.

Am still enjoying the story.

Love Sonia :)
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From apkblack on April 02, 2009
Okay, I want to review this but don't know how to put it all into words. So I'm copying from another reviewer who said it just right.

"man.
WTF
this is the creepiest story i have ever read.
its actually fucking WRONG.
and disturbing
and horrific.
yet i find myself addicted
with hermiones plight."

Something tells me, after this chptr, that Draco will somehow be involved in her rescue. I'd appreciate that. Or maybe something tells me that just because I would appreciate that.

I want it to end soon for her but I'm appreciating very much how consistent you're being with Albus able to put the spotlight on what happened, not letting Sirius get away with justifying "making her his" because she eventually had some pleasure from it, and making it clear that from the first second that she rejected it or struggled against it, it was officially rape, and that eventual pleasure doesn't absolve Sirius from responsibility for that rape.

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From ANON - bw on March 28, 2009
While your description of the birth of the first baby is good, I believe that the description of the second baby's birth was inaccurate. Breech biths are extremly more difficult than the normal delivery. I also just wanted to point out that you should never pull on a baby during a breech birth in fear of hurting the baby's nech or tearing the mother.
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