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By : bubblybabs

From cathyhester on March 21, 2009
Labor--have read several stories about labor and very interesting how it's handled differently by all. One where she had baby at Hogwarts with Poppy and when done Poppy told father she was all healed for that night. Ewwww! Last thing I'd want after a day giving birth. You went the other way with no magic involved.
I started reading this for the SS/HG pairing, but honestly now, am dreading that unless Severus is able to do something regarding rescue. At this point though, would keep reading whatever way it goes.
Read several reviews who complained about chapter length. I read very fast and like the length of these chapters.
Ron's daughter seems to be a perfect control for Hermoine's outbursts. Seems too good a blackmail tool for Kreacher and Sirius.
It's hard for me to read this and not hope for several deaths! For example, Kreacher.
Is Sirius going to the Dept. of Mysteries? Is he dying soon?
I do not believe that St. Mungo's has an adequate psychiatric ward to handle all the people who have been messed up like this.
Checking daily for updates! Please don't stop writing. You have a story that needs to be finished. Don't leave us hanging.
Thanks for writing, again.

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From cathyhester on March 21, 2009
No, I haven't written anything out there. I read. And the last word I would use to describe any of this story is boring. Update soon!

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From Wistfu1Stargazer on March 19, 2009
RE: chapter 26

I'm sorry... I'm such a perv, but I absolutely adore Remus and his increased libido and reactions to thinking about her, or when he hears her name, etc. I can't help it if I feel that he is a sexy beast that I wouldn't mind doing naughty things with.
*SMIRK* *LEER*
;~D

Well done--keep up the good work!

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

1) 'Sirius ["Sirius" should be "Severus"] stiffened slightly when Lucius mentioned the name of his own sister-in-law, ...'

2) '
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From WesleyY7 on March 18, 2009
"Labor Ne Plus Ultra" - Labor of a most profound or intense degree. You said it. Much better title than "Labor So Bad I'm Going to Make Sure You Never Want to Give Birth...Ever." There's so much I could say about the birth, but Hermione said it best with the multiple "Ows!" throughout.

*Sirius continues to remain a bastard, but I'm so glad he's beginning to doubt himself and his negative emotions towards Hermione. I'm keeping my fingers crossed he'll start to see the error of his ways soon.

*"brightened up at the thought that elves could at least use their own special magic to Apparate within the castle walls without detection." So basically the kids aren't even safe at Hogwarts. Crap.

*"And she's falling apart after just a few contractions? Gods, this is going to fucking suck!
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From Elphaba on March 18, 2009
That was a surprise! Great job! I loved Molly coming in for the rescue! Can't Dobby kill Kreacher or something? Jeez!
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From Elphaba on March 18, 2009
Wow that was an INTENSE chapter! You did a Great job on blending it together! on to the next chapter!
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From ANON - AJ on March 18, 2009
This fic holds an odd place in my mind. It's the story that made me realise that perhaps I was reading too much 'porn' - and definitely too much of this kind. I felt I was somehow starting to condition myself to expect/respond to a certain kind of treatment, which wasn't entirely fair to me. And I resolved to just stop reading anything involving non-con at all. However, I left this after chapter 3, and I couldn't stand not knowing what happened. So maybe as you conclude this I can get some closure, I don't know. It is very well written though, and you got at least one person to think, though perhaps not in the exact way you wanted. Thankyou.
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From sbrande on March 18, 2009
Oh my, you did stun me with that delivery. Two babies, each from different fathers. I thought Sirius must be sterile or something, perhaps from Azkaban.

Damn Kreacher and his stupid elf body. I never liked even Dobby and couldn't understand why everyone cried when he died in book 7. I surely didn't shed a tear.

I wonder if Hermione will go back to Bella's? Will Molly get Oblivated or will she also take a vow? I shall not even hazard to guess the babies names, but please tell me that Hermione won't name Ron's girl Rose!?

Love Sonia :)
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From abbicee on March 17, 2009
Hmm, well maybe Sirius has redeemed himself a little bit in trying to think for himself and throw off Kreacher's teachings, however I think he's had more than his share of fun for his life so maybe Molly can make it a nice sharp knife instead of a dull one. Will Molly be obliviated and will it really take if certain strong emotions are involved or will there be a sort of ghost in the mind? I'm hoping that the birth of his daughter will change how he thinks about women and Hermione especially. After all, how would he feel if it were his daughter who'd been kidnapped and turned into a sex slave? Will Kreacher be able to exert the same influence now that Sirius has a daughter to think of? Kreacher is going to be a problem, yes he is.
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From cathyhester on March 16, 2009
Found your story recently and am now up to date. First--Thanks for the decent grammar and spelling. It makes a difference to me to read, a big difference. Sorry to anyone else but that's the way I was brought up. Second, I'm very disturbed by your story. Disturbed in a good way in that I can't wait for more. Please keep writing. Your comments about wanting people to see the other side is so right. I'm kind of scared to think where you are going with this but I'll take the ride. I'll review from here on out if you'll continue the story to the end. Thanks
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From ANON - soniab on March 15, 2009
Yeehee, I love Severus and his way of dealing with things. Go Severus!
Secondly, I adore Remus and felt really sorry for him in this chapter, the poor bastard was so conflicted.
I loathe Ron and wouldn't mind if you killed him off. Take him out I say.
Yeah, go the twins. Love the twins.
Hermione is a lost cause really, all I ask of you is when she gets out of there PLEASE don't stick her with Ron I don't think I could cope with that. And besides, Ginny would go into a jealousy rage ;)

Can't wait to see what you have planned for the birth, I hope she has the baby in her rooms and not with Bella, though I don't think you'd do that to us. *Gives hopeful look*

Love Sonia :)
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From abbicee on March 14, 2009
I'm not sure what to say about Sirius. He's become such a monster that I wonder if he's become possessed by one of those alien pod invaders and the real Sirius is dead. I just hope that he pays for his crimes and Kreacher gets it twice as bad. I'm really starting to worry about Remus and the way he's becoming aroused just by the thought of using Hermione. Is Kreacher still managing to get into his head or is that mad house elf going around spiking the food? Or has the stress simply become too much and Remus is starting to have a nervous breakdown? Have Ron and Ginny taken vows also or is just the threat of their relationship being outed enough to keep them in line. If so, what will it take before one of them has had enough and decides to hell with the consequences they're telling someone? Whatever happens the Weasley children are going to be plenty screwed up. I can just see Molly dulling her favorite carving knife for castration purposes. At least the Headmaster and Snape are getting an idea of what is going on. I wonder how Snape will get out of using Hermione, but maybe he can use her advanced pregnancy to his advantage. Still I'm wondering just what Bella is up to. I can't help but think she has some ulterior motive other than boredom and randiness. Can't wait to see what happens next.

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From WesleyY7 on March 14, 2009
I forced you to add the extra stuff back in? Great, now everyone's going to blame me for having to wait an extra chapter for the birth! That's right, just throw me to the mob! I'm the sacraficial lamb. ;)

*"Remus stood against the far wall, hands in his pockets as he looked at his feet." I love this line because of the visual. Remus, another victim is this zoo, standing by helplessly waiting for things to play out knowing he can't do a thing about it. It was hard enough with Hermione, but now three of his former students are going to be subjected to Merlin knows what, telling them to just go along with whatever Sirius says. Poor Remus. :(

*With all the victims in this chapter, I really, really feel for here is Ron. Being thrust into this situation, having all this information thrown at him, seeing the girl he loves after all these months pregnant...*pets poor Ron*. The image of him sitting on the couch between Hermione and Ginny clutching the girls' hands makes me sad.

*Okay, crazy enraged Sirius scares me even more when he cries. Yeah, unpredictable mood swings and insane.

*"For the first time, she felt a glimmer of hope that if she were to escape this room, that she wouldn't be ostracized and left alone, an outcast with a closet full of shame to keep locked away forever." Poor Hermione. Please don't her fate by dark and unhappy! She's suffered enough. You're evilly rubbing your hands together right now, aren't you?

*"He basked in the wonderment of his luck
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From Wistfu1Stargazer on March 10, 2009
RE: chapter 25

Woah, Remus is a stud in a half, hey? I wouldn't be unhappy to have him come knocking at my door. Know what I mean?
;~D

Very sexy action with Remus, I especially liked it when he was telling Sirius that Hermione was his (Remus') now--COOL!

Well done--keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to additional chapters.
:D
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From Elphaba on March 10, 2009
Wow That was an awesome chapter! You really pulled it together. Poor Remus I feel sorry for him. Love the incorporation of "Oh yes you will" And how far can Kreacher spread his bad vibes! Wow!
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