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Reviews for Rivalry

By : starstruck86
  • From LadyZombie on November 12, 2009
    Wow! Intense chapter! I was having a really crap day but you made me smile with Albus' favorite song and the mental image of Ron and Harry bumping bums and Albus clapping happily from his portrait.

    As for the ending...well my my, the proverbial shit is about to his the proverbial fan I suspect.

    Thanks for the update!
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  • From tambrathegreat on November 12, 2009
    I enjoyed the new chapter. I was glad to see the progress, but sad that Severus once again messed it up. Will these two ever get on the same page? I hope they do.

    The dance with Harry was hilarious. You described it perfectly. I also liked Stalking-Snape. That would be just what he does when he was in enomoured with someone.

    Thanks for the update. I will wait (im)patiently for the next one.


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  • From Narius on November 11, 2009
    If there isn't more of this story soon, I'm going to scream bloody murder and go at my laptop with a hatchet! Please! I love this story. It's written so well. More?
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  • From ANON - Tab on November 05, 2009
    I really like this story. It's such an interesting pairing but you write it beautifully.
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  • From badkittyuno on November 03, 2009
    All I can say is...Ron with a nipple piercing? Yum!
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  • From ANON - hairsprayX12 on November 03, 2009
    OMGG!!!!!!

    This chapter had me cracking up so bad. Seriously, they both need to get a clue, and loved Harry and Hermoine being the ones to "giving" Ron a clue, and how appropriate that both Ron and Sev wanked off thinking of one another, heh...
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  • From ANON - kai on November 03, 2009
    awesome! i come back from vacation and i get 2 chaps to read!! awesome! i loved it. that shower scene OMFG! and ron no longer being oblivious is of the good! great job as usual! can't wait for the next one.
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  • From tambrathegreat on November 02, 2009
    Mwahahahahahaha! the shower scene! I loved Snape valiantly trying to cover up his arousal, while still being snarky. Lovely bit of writing and you have me convinced that Ron, though not the brightest wizard of his age, has his canny moments.

    Love the sexual tension, but I have to tell you that when you had Snape trounce Ron during the Valentine's day breakfast, I cringed. That was entirely uncalled for, and I'm glad he got a bit of pay back with the concussion.

    Thanks for making this so original. I really love the way the story is going.

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  • From LadyZombie on November 02, 2009
    They're dancing around each other so much that by the time one of them decides to make the first move, they'll be too exhausted to pucker....or anything else.

    A dance coming up, eh? I can't wait to see what you'll do with that!

    A face like a smacked arse? Remember that line in Priscilla where Bernadette tells Tick that he's "got a face like a cat's arse"? I thought of that when I read that (now that you've got me back on Priscilla).

    And of course Ron's chocolate consumption is up. He's got to substitue sex for something after all.


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  • From talley on November 02, 2009
    How can I keep up with you? I'm fancinated by your duel fic on lj and this one is getting better and better. I like the easiness of Ron's relationship with Harry and Hermione in this one. I hope there is more interaction. Ron always seems to be alone when he has decisions to make. Hermione is the brightest witch of her age isn't she. *grins* I find the little explosion to be small warning, no? I would also like to note that you bring up his scars which many writers fail to do. Even JK seemed to forget them lol. I say thank you for that. Ack. No new chapter for a while uh? Well as long as you do come back and not forget our Ron and Snape since you've got yourself in other pairings too.
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  • From badkittyuno on November 01, 2009
    Ah you're killing me! Must go reread Don't Let the Whirlwind Pass By to get my fulfillment of smut. Seriously, though, I'm loving this story. Definitely hooked. And this line made me literally laugh out loud: "Not a submissive
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  • From ANON - hairsprayX12 on October 30, 2009
    How much do I love the snark that flies out of Sev's mouth and Ron just can't seem to guard his tongue either...lol...

    I can't wait to see all that pent up passion unleashed :)

    They just crack me up, especially when they have those little conversations with themselves inside their heads, best one liners ever!!!
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  • From tambrathegreat on October 30, 2009
    Oh, the mistletoe would have been too easy for this story. I love the sexual tension you have Severus going through. He's perfect in his pent up way. Ron is a bit clueless, but I suppose that he's like his mother, once he has an idea in his head, he just can't give it up.

    I'd say our two heroes are neck and neck on the two wrongs not making a right. I did feel for Snape when Ron called him a greasy bastard. That would be a slap in the face after the somewhat overt flirting Snape was doing with the strawberries. (Which, by the way was a very nice, slightly steamy scene, even if it was one-sided.)

    Lovely chapter. I just wish you could write faster. Not that I"m pressuring you,really. I just love this story as much as I loved Seraphim. The way you write these two, they have real chemistry.

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  • From LadyZombie on October 30, 2009
    My, My! All this snip snip snipping going on. Oh yeah, they're definitely going to do it!

    I'm so ashamed, I'm obviously going to have to watch Priscilla again because I missed the reference.

    BTW, I'm starting in on Hold Me Now. Now I can't get the Thompson Twins out of my head.
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  • From ANON - hairsprayX12 on October 28, 2009
    Damn, I know I say this a lot but...its true...you write Ron and Sev so damn well!!!!

    You capture their personalities so well, and no matter what the story is you always manage it make it interesting, funny, emotional, hot, sexy, and just a bit naughty.

    These two mesh so perfectly with one another, or at least the way you write them they do.

    It's so much fun to watch them get on each others' nerves but really that just proves how much they can influence each other. And I have to admit I love snarky Severus and smart ass Ron.
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