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From LadyLaran on January 22, 2012
I think I missed it..how did Ron get that status?
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From ANON - Laughinglast on January 22, 2012
Definitely do a Mama Weasley scene, what fun! But I'd do it after the first task so she can pitch her fit in ALL directions! Our esteemed Headmaster should definitely receive the benefit of Molly's motherly care - both barrels.

I'm really enjoying these fics, and your characters and plot ideas are truly entertaining. Kudos to you!
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From ANON - red713 on January 22, 2012
Thanks for the new update! I can't wait to see their meeting with the current Lord Voldemort - his impression of Harry should be interesting.

Ron's punishment is a tad unbelievable. (Consider, for instance, the amount of money it would take to aquire another dragon at the last minute, pay for its transportation and upkeep, take on additional dragon handlers, etc. Not to mention, drawing international attention to one young boy's misbehavior seems a bit... weird.) His /reaction/ to his punishment, however, is. I think you've done a good job painting Ron in a negative light without, as you say, making him evil. He's a teenager - they do stupid things and handle uncomfortable situations with immaturity. It's what they do.

So who was the one following Sirius? I thought it would be another Barty Crouch - maybe waiting to ambush Sirius like the canon character did to Moody before impersonating him. Is the follower still there, or was it the "snake assassin"?
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From shadowbunn on January 22, 2012
Ah mini-cliff hanger how dare you? Wonderful chapter I look forward to you next update and your response to how Molly would react is spot on with the personality that I see being portrayed in this fic and in my opinion with the way Ron has been acting I believe that the second option would be better and not knowing how you want to portray the Weasley family I would also think that she would yell at Sirius and Harry for putting her baby in danger after Ron faces the dragon just a thought. Great chapter I love your story! Please update soon.
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From bloodshound on January 22, 2012
arrrrgh. what a place to leave it.
snickers, i can't wait for ronnikins to get his kiester kicked and as for mio, good grief, you'll have to pound that point home with a mallet to get it thru her dogma d up head.

hmmm, i could envisage both responses but really, i reckon she'd do both. u know, blaze up with the 'oh, my pooooor child, how could this happen' then settle into the 'oh we're soooooo proud of you Ron. such a great opportunity... blah blah blah' sadly both responses are likely to further the exposure of his inner oik. the first by making him even more resentful and the second by selling his head.
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From ANON - Storm on January 21, 2012
Well I just found your IsttD series and just got caught up with both. I am very impressed and can't wait to read more. It is very well thought out, very interesting and other than a few places where it looks like a few words were accidentally deleted, well written. I'm not a Ron-hater but I also was annoyed with how petty he could be and how he could allow his jealousy to overcome him but I appreciated you also noting that you were taking into account how he feels about Harry having everything easily landing in his lap because I also thought in the books Harry could have done things differently or reacted differently and things might not have gone the same way. Don't let flamers get to you, because you have a lot of happy readers and I can't wait to see whats next and how Voldemort and Marvolo merge and act toasted Harry. Keep up the excellent work!
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From bloodshound on January 20, 2012
A right royal little git, isn't he! I hope the revenge is... suitable. *cackles gleefully. with siri and sev working on it, it should be priceless.
oh i do want to know whats up with Siri. His paranoia can't but just that surely.
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From ANON - kjpotter on January 20, 2012
So far so good! Will Harry be resorting to legal action with Andromeda? Last book, it seemed he went to her for almost everything, so it seems she would be the first person he asked when dealing with a magical contract.

I'm also looking forward to the end of the relationship with Ron; he's been nothing but a cruel idiot. I'm actually quite surprised by Hermione's reaction to him; she seemed almost decent before all this happened, despite going to Lupin behind his back, so to see her acting this way sort of came out of the blue, or at least that's how it seemed to me. (I guess I ought to re-read the story to make sure I have your Hermione down; I might have mixed yours with someone else's.) Anyway, I anticipate new relationships for Harry, and not just the LVhp relationship either, although that one and the promise of a D/s relationship is what made me start reading it.

I can't wait to see the dynamics between LVhp once Tom and Voldy have merged. Please don't make the Dark Lord too much of a pushover. Yes, he'll be caring of Harry, but a larger portion ought to be jealous and possessive of Harry. I expect, especially in the beginning, that LV will demand overt public and private shows of submission from HP until he is more secure in HP's loyalty. I also expect LV to have a vulnerable side, but not to know what to do with it except to show it inappropriately. But of course this is your story, and I have complete faith in your abilities to do the story justice.

Can't wait! Thank you again for being such a quick updater (even though it's gotten me spoiled. When I don't see an update in a day, I'm unreasonably disappointed...and utterly ecstatic when it does show up in another day or so.) Thank you for writing. Please please please don't abandon this story (like another scribe who shall remain nameless, much like the fae.)
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From bloodshound on January 19, 2012
and mio shows her true colours. really, they are so blasie with har's life n health. As for ron, he could be be more it he wasn't so lazy and didn't let his temper rule him.
I'm glad har has sev and marvy who belive him.
Will the other horcruxes be making an appearance apart from in passing?
i noticed u cut ced out completely. good, less complications to working the story.
I look forward to the trip down the rabbit hole. it should be some ride. ^^
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From ANON - lady_date on January 18, 2012
I love they way this is flowing so far, it keeps me ingages and aching for the next chapter. I am a little curious though, most because I love them so; but how closely do you think the twin will stick to harry? It it's too much of a spoiler question, don't answer it.
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From akira121 on January 18, 2012
This really is amazing! I love how you write everybody; almost like a parody of sorts for some of the characters(namely Hermione and Ron). My favorite is how Marvolo is written; he does have a soft spot for Harry, but is still thinking of ways to manipulate him. Just how he might have been back when he was in school(minus the soft spot part). Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, especially the BIG blow up between Ron and Harry, whenever that may be.
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From ANON - SinfulMind on January 18, 2012
I really can't wait till Voldemort is finally back, all merged and at least half sane :D After that I hope that the action will slow down a little and you focus more on HPLV relationship and their plans for the Wizarding World, and in more detail too :)

A decent job so far, keep it up and always work towards improvement :)

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From ANON - Gabby on January 18, 2012
Hey, I've been reading you stories since the beginning of the first one and I think they're really good. I don't usually leave reviews but I finally decided that it was about time to it, since I've been reading it for so long and you update so frequently. The plot is really interesting and the fic is pretty well written, which is something I don't see around all that much. I like where you're going (or seem to be going) with this, and I'm really looking forward to when Harry and Marvolo/Voldemort really get their romantic/sexual relationship started. I just have a question though; is this story going to be Mpreg? I ask because I usually find it very interesting (if it's done right) and it doesn't seem all that unlikely so far, but I know it wasn't in the warnings.
Keep up the good work!
Gabby
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From QuintiliVare on January 18, 2012
Just poking my head in to represent all of us who soak up every word, but never review! I love this story, and it's in my top 5 favorite stories! (which, for people like me with no life who just sit around and read fanfiction every day for the last who knows how many years, is a very good thing!) Also, I am glad that you are holding off on harry and marvolo's future relationship. I'm not one of those 'they have to be of legal age!' people, but I would probably not have read this far if it had started in the chamber. So thank you for that. I hope your muse stays with you, so we fans can have many more wonderful stories!
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From ANON - Tempest_BDA on January 18, 2012
I love your story and can't wait for your next update. I'm so glad the final blowout will occur soon I keep wanting to strangle Ron. I hope Harry fights back this time the whole just taking it thing has to be hard for him. Especially since Ron is being such a prat urgh. I hope Harry decimates him. Will Harry be participating in the Triwizard tournament? If so can we please avoid the Harry becomes the Papers/schools whipping boy thing again? I want harry start to fight back with a vengeance. Oh I can't wait for Marvolo to Join with Voldemort! Also for Harry & Voldemort to finally be together officially XD. Will Marvolo start Harry's submissive training soon? You hinted at it a bit for a second but then focused on the more physical/fighting training part. I would hope so since Marvolo will join with Voldemort at Yule. Sorry for the rambling. Great story can't wait for more :D
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