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By : evil-minded
  • From ANON - bill560682 on July 13, 2012
    personally i think harry would find out about sex from the creevey brothers. the way i see it is almost everyone goes home after the yule ball an the creevey brothers see how down harry is about everyone being against him as a cheater to get into the tri-wizard championship. so the creevey brothers try to lift harry's spirits the best way they know how an that would be sex. they sneak into harry's room christmas morning and they each give him a morning blow job. now with harry being asleep when they start harry thinks it to be nothing more then a great dream an by the time he figures out it is not a dream he is so close to blowing his load he could care less who's lips are sucking him off. an after getting 2 blow jobs back to back harry really does not care about anything at all so when the creevey brothers suggest to harry that he fuck them both in the ass he figure hell why not an ass is an ass so if i would consider doing so to a girl if they asked then why not a boy after all an ass is an ass.
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  • From jujukitty on July 13, 2012
    great story so far, it's interesting to see hwo their thoughts for each other begin to change, how snape makes harry actually -think- about what it is he wants. though i can tell by your writing style that english isn't your first language, you've done very well with it overall and, though repetitive at some points, everything is mostly very clear. keep up the good work, i look forward to seeing how snape deals with harry's numerous issues and how harry begins to develop
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  • From JeanMcIory on July 12, 2012
    I'm still not sure if Severus realized what he had said himself, with his ancient "vow", because if he realized, then some things that are about to come should be more clear to him than they actually are, or will be
    just remembered it again while reading that chapter, and it's been great again
    please, please, update sooner than that - you HAVE them already after all, you just need to get them online!
    your loyal Gryffindor
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  • From SteveSettler on July 12, 2012
    You haven't centered your break line in this chapter, dear evil *lol*
    The chapter however is as good as I remember it, keep up with getting the chapters online, you haven't updated one of your other two stories :) ...
    love it - and still Slytherin, never mind your house cup standing here or not
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  • From ANON - Nicole on July 08, 2012
    I am really enjoying this story despite the errors in grammar, Though I think you've done really well considering that English is not your first language. I know some poeple who have spoken and written english all their lives who don't do it as well as you have. I think the developement of the characters are coming a long nicely and the set up of the relationship is done well. The information on BDSM is very real and not blown way out of proportion like some fan-fictions can be, and having Severus understand that Harry is not yet a full grown man but still a teanager is a good. I really liked that bit of history about Severus's life and start into a BDSM realationship with his muggle mentor... I thought it gave a much more solid base for Severus's education than just him learning a twisted version of BDSM at Voldemort's feet. If you would like I would be more than willing to help you with your grammar a bit. I'm no expert certainly but I woiuld like to help if you want me to.
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  • From ANON - M on July 08, 2012
    Wow! I just read these 5 chapters and i'm really impresse
    This story is great and i hope you'll update often ;) and you won't grew tired of this story, as far as i can see, it will be a very long one...
    So english is not your first language- it isn't mine either and i hope you understand my terrible english
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  • From ANON - sam on July 07, 2012
    I like this story. Your english isn't so bad but you may want to get a beta reader to clean it upa little.

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  • From Markhal on July 07, 2012
    I love your story! I hope Snape will be able to help Harry and show him how it is to be taken care of.
    Thank you for your story
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  • From bloodshound on July 06, 2012
    do you have a bata or were you in a hurry? This chappie didn't flow as smoothly as the others seemed too. Very stilted and awkwardly phrased in places but at least the general idea could be gotten. I know you said English wasn't your first language so kudos for attempting this.

    Now to the Chappie. It's a good thing Sev has learned patience as he's going to need it to help har. Kid has a lot of emotional damage to unravel. I think such a relationship would do good things for Har. having even one person who cares and is wiling to guide you can make a great difference. They'll be good for each other.
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  • From JeanMcIory on July 02, 2012
    "giving in to the heart", does this mean it's the chapter I think it is? *hope* *hope* *hope*
    Gryffindor

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  • From JeanMcIory on July 02, 2012
    I think they got along because they already have feelings for each other, Severus clearly has already looked Harry up and down and Harry too seems to start with something, whatever it is, I don't even know what it is in later chapters, but well, maybe I'll find it out this time while reading
    Gryffindor of course
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  • From SteveSettler on July 02, 2012
    stupid question indeed, of course Harry should have known by then, really, it only shows how inexperienced and how shy, how virgin-like Harry really is, what of course gives Snape all options, he can train with Harry and he can do with Harry however he wishes, absolutely great
    Slytherin
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  • From SteveSettler on July 02, 2012
    ah, two chapters to read, absolutely great
    I still love the story and it is really interesting reading it again, especially with the knowledge where you lead this one
    Slytherin still, despite anything :D

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  • From moodysavage on June 28, 2012
    oh noooo!!! Snape was sleeping with Lily? Please don't let Snape be Harry's dad... please please please!!!!

    and there was also a point in the story that was an 'a-ha' moment! well... maybe. When Harry showed a flicker of amusement and then his face went back to being confused that was the second time Snape had caught an amused look on Harry's face. And Harry is acting so hesitant, polite, confused... like a total uke. But he wants to know allllllll about this. But that amusement... is Harry acting!??!! If he's not... then let the training begin lol! And if he is acting... then he's setting up Snape to train him lol!!!! Either way I love it :)
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  • From bloodshound on June 28, 2012
    This is really good. I've read some with a similar theme, but in them snape is an opportunistic dick who takes Har and twists him to his own desires. In this one I believe he genuinely wants to help and guide har. So, well done with that.
    I did spot one typo. Boosted, meaning to lift where you meant Boasted or being boastful.
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