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Reviews for Dark Lord and Lady

By : LoverofDarkness
  • From ANON - Anon on December 02, 2006
    You are such a fucking idiot. What are you 12? people criticize everything. As many have said before. If you don't want to be criticized- don't fucking post your fucking story. Even JKR gets criticized you moron. get you head out of your ass.
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  • From ANON - megara1 on December 02, 2006
    go you. you tell those meany heads. i like your story. and i can' wait for you to update.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 01, 2006
    fuck you back dear.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 26, 2006
    its a review, there just stating there opinions just embrace it.

    anyways i like the story, i dont like how your writting it,
    all the 'yous' keeos confusing me, i cant tell whos talking.
    or whos persepective it is. i bearly find this pairing and this seems like a intresting thing, but i cant follow it :(
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  • From ANON - Leah on November 24, 2006
    I really like your story! If I was writing it, I would do it different, but every writer has their own style and yours is fine! Please update soon! :D

    ~Leah
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  • From ANON - permafrostsin not sgined in on November 23, 2006
    I have not read your story yet but I read your note and I had to say I agree with you thats why I stopped writting really people are such jerks some times but I asurre you I shall read it and no doubut love it. Here O go!
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  • From ANON - Jinnarrin Kain on November 21, 2006
    I love this story. it is so easy to understand. Please I beg of you to right more. I am really excited to find out what is wrong with Hermione. Here is a question for you... Is she pregnant? Or are her injuries just not healing correctly? Write me back I would really like to know.
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  • From ANON - Dark Child on November 21, 2006
    I LOVE YOUR STORY PLEASE KEEP UPDATING IT. i LIKE THE WAY YOU WRITE IT FROM THE POV. IT'S A STORY PLEASE FINSIH IT!
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 20, 2006
    Did we hurt your feelings? Well who cares if you put a story up your risking getting bad review- especally if the story is like yours with no redeeming parts. You don't like it, stop posting and stop your fucking crying.
    I personally have dozens of ideas for stories but I know I can't write so I don't. What I do is post challanges and wait to see if someone take up my idea. Maybe you should do that you twit.
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  • From ANON - AlexiDrake on November 20, 2006
    Still like the story, so keep up the good work.
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  • From Annie on November 19, 2006
    As with the other reviews, I agree that this story has a promising potential. However, the plot and ideas don't seem really thought out. The POVs are all confusing, and what happens in the story is also unclear. If you develop the little things, such as why Hermione's doing what she's doing and explain her relationships with the others, along with where and when she actually become interested in Tom, then this story will have a huge impact. I believe a beta would help you there, as there are a few misspelled words here and there. Please don't take this the wrong way, because I really enjoyed this fic. I just know that it can be so much better. =] Good luck!
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  • From ANON - dgb7 on November 17, 2006
    I've read all the chapters, and I have to say that this story really has a potential. Anyway, you should follow the advice Koppe has given to you, because there are some things that aren't that clear in ths fic. And I think that, if you do as you have been suggested to, your work will be brilliant.
    I know you might be annoyed by people saying you how to write your story, it's just that I think that some constructive criticism would help.
    And don't mind people who flame, they are simply so ignorant to not be able to give advice to the others, acting like brainy people when they are all but that.
    So, keep writing, and make of this story the great piece of work it could be if you paied much attention to the way you develop the plot.
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  • From ANON - Koppe on November 13, 2006
    The story and plot have great potential.
    I would however like a bit more background about Hermione's decent into darkness, and her friends abandoning her (I thought it went awfully fast): When and how did she start becomming interested in the Dark Arts; when did she fall in love with Voldemort (when did he fall for her); when did she start hanging around Slytherins... how did they welcome her; when did her friends start to drift apart. Hopefully that would answers questions about how she was still being confided with about the orders plans (admittedly, hunting horcruxes is a rather long-term endevour). I would expect the crumbling of the Trio's friendship to be more drawn out.
    I did find the jumping between POV -- especially since even they weren't always consistant all the time (wrong pronoun).
    The story is OK now, but would be better if you chose one POV and stuck with it. It could be truly great if slowed it down and expanded it some... how did little-miss-Gryffindor-know-it-all decend into the dark arts? how did she fall for a monster? how did Voldemort fall for a mudblood? how could her friends let her decend so far into darkness?
    Keep up the good work,
    -Koppe


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  • From ANON - AlexiDrake on November 12, 2006
    Good story, keep it up. Oh, and keep the chapters comeing.
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  • From ANON - angel on November 12, 2006
    i really really like your story .. please update soon i would love to read more ...later for now

    angel
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