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Reviews for Dark Lord and Lady

By : LoverofDarkness
  • From ANON - *DB* on November 12, 2006
    @7 awesome story there aren't enough voldemort and hermione stories!! I love this story!!!! Update soon
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  • From ANON - ... on November 11, 2006
    Ok; I'm kinda confused. What's with the 'you'? Like you said or you walked? Isn't this about Hermione? If it's in her P.O.V, shouldn't it be 'I said' or 'I walked'? Why and what's with the 'You'? Lucious isn't spelt like that by the way; it's spelt as 'Lucius'
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 10, 2006
    Interesting idea. I have read all 7 chapters and I think that you would benifit from having someone beta read for you. The way that you jump around from different peoples points of view disrupts the flow of the story and you seem to have some trouble working out your you's and I's which makes your work very hard to read.
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  • From ANON - Dylan on November 10, 2006
    The majority of stories on AFF are ooc, so Hermione siding with LV is no shock.
    The constant changes in POV's was irritating to say the least. I much prefer a story to flow rather than snippets of different views.
    And the dialogue was a little wooden.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 10, 2006
    If you don't want to flamed I suggest you stop writing such utter crap. I read all 7 chapters and they all were badly written. If more than one person tells you that it's really bad-- maybe you should listen and stop posting,
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