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Reviews for An Unwanted Marriage, But An Unexpected Love

By : jaymclg
  • From ANON - meg on May 04, 2011
    This was freaking painful. I read the first chapter and thought, 'nah...no way it can be any worse' and then IT GOT WORSE. I was going to grin and bear through this, but if the first two chapters are this God awful I don't think I can make it through thirty one more.
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  • From shadowchsr on February 08, 2011
    I am three chapters into this story and I'm afraid to say I think I'm going to have to stop reading. I could live with Barty possibly having an evil twin, but then writing him in as a Marauder, giving him a Scottish accent when none of the other Crouches a rather formal London accent was just too much. In a way you just wrote a new character that you thought would compliment Hermione, played by David Tennant, and completely disregarded the original Barty Crouch. I am a fan of David Tennant as well but the insertion of a totally new Barty Crouch, not even one remorseful for his past just feels wrong to me, like a horrible cheat in regards to making this kind of pairing work successfully. I'm sure you've had plenty of others who love this story but sadly i'm not among them. Take care.
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  • From Heidi191976 on December 08, 2008
    Excellent. I enjoyed reading this story.
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  • From Heidi191976 on October 27, 2008
    An excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From ANON - Kat on October 26, 2008
    You write very well, for the most part. However, when writing smut... You use the word "suckle," or "suckled," or "suckling" so frequently that it really detracts from everything else
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  • From Heidi191976 on October 18, 2008
    Excellent. I look forward to reading more.
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  • From Heidi191976 on October 16, 2008
    Excellent. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Update soon.
    I still think that you should make Barty's real name Bartemius and not Bariums.
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  • From Heidi191976 on October 13, 2008
    An excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From Heidi191976 on October 05, 2008
    Excellent. I look forward to reading more. I am glad that Sirius and Barty will be with their wives for the school year.
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  • From Heidi191976 on September 24, 2008
    Excellent. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From jessirose85 on September 23, 2008
    That was a great chapter....it was beautiful how they each explained their feelings for the women xxxx cannot wait for another chapter 10/10
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  • From Malfoysgirl on September 21, 2008
    Wow, great update. Please add more soon
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  • From jessirose85 on September 20, 2008
    Love it!! I hope there are plenty more chapters...you can't really stop at the wedding anyway...cannot wait for more 10/10
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  • From Heidi191976 on September 20, 2008
    A wonderful chapter. I loved the ceremony for the two couples. The only part I was a bit confused about was Barty's full name. You put it as Bariums Crouch Jr. Shouldn't it be Bartemius? I look forward to reading more.
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  • From Malfoysgirl on September 18, 2008
    Great update! Please add more soon
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