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From Wistfu1Stargazer on December 20, 2008
RE: chapter five

Ugh! Kreacher is a twisted/sick f@ck that I hope will be put down like the rabid creature that he is, before he harms Hermione anymore.

I hope that Sirius will be able to get his head out of his arse and see that the magazines are nothing but make-believe, BEFORE pushing Hermione into insanity. You know?

Well done--keep up the good work!
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From Wistfu1Stargazer on December 20, 2008
RE: chapters one through three

Riveting, highly erotic, naughty/sinful pleasures, taboo activities all of which are very well written and very exciting to read.

I love your explainations given at the end of the chapters--very informative. Thank you.

Well done--keep up the good work!
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From WesleyY7 on December 17, 2008
So much going on in Chapter 12! It's good that people are beginning to get suspicious, and I was pleased that Sirius felt some remorse for hexing Remus. That being said...Sirius has officially lost it! That paragraph towards the end of the chapter was very telling. Actually believing everyone would forget about her. Worried that he would never "use her again." Eagerly looking forward to having Snape take her, knowing she won't like it. You may be giving her oragasms sir, but I'm not liking you at all.

I'm assuming that Kreacher is still enaged in his nighlty teachings as I'm guessing he gave Hermione the idea for the special massage. He's got her trained well too. I don't think she was even aware she was playing with her breasts while talking to Sirius.

I need to stop looking at your warnings! I am already really concerned about the pregnancy, but was suicide always there? And I'm assuming that HG/V and HG/BL means she'll be taken right into the headquarters of the enemy. You are dark! Although I am cracking up that alongside the warnings of minor, scat, and beast, you also put in a warning for Unresolved Sexual Tension. Way to cover your bases! ;) If I say I fangirl you, would you write quicker? ;)
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From Elphaba on December 16, 2008
Can't wait to see what happens next!
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From ANON - John Olsen on December 16, 2008
Amazing story, never had read a so well developed S&M story that also have plot and quite detail.

Wonder if Hermione is really pregnant? will Krecher now obtain Ginny as a substitute?. That will be nice Hermione need a "companion". maybe a mistress?
Maybe now that Hermione have more training she can go to school? after all will be more interesting if she stay with Sirius willing.
Really hope you write more soon.

JO
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From ANON - roxie on December 16, 2008
public sex is just so HOT HOT HOT!!! Loved it!
Ooooohhhhh the noose seems to be getting tighter, can't wait for more. Keep that nasty boy squirming and the heat on, really liked the tension in this chapter. I almost didn't read it out of fear, I am so glad I did.
Keep 'em coming (lol)
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From ANON - JordenK on December 15, 2008
Oh, no no no! I know it's in the warnings and you said things would get darker, but please don't have Hermione be pregnant! Now that they're talking about it, all I can think of is them using her while she's pregnant. And I dread to contemplate what kind of things Kreacher would come up with to torture her and the baby. I know you already have the story onlined and it's probably not proper review etiquiette, but I'm worried. This isn't something readers an scroll by because the impact it would have on Hermione would be so much more than everything else she's going through.

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From ANON - StaceyLo12 on December 13, 2008
This is an extremely well written and erotic story-- congrats!
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From ANON - Cat on December 13, 2008
So, to be honest, I started reading because the author warning was so damn long I had to see what all the fuss was about. Now I keep reading because I actually care about the characters and want to see the story resolved (as improbable as the plot is). My feelings for Sirius are so... confused, I suppose is the term for it. I can't wait to see how this is going to end.
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From WesleyY7 on December 12, 2008
You rock so hard! Every time I turn around, you're either posting a new chapter or changing up a scene or warning. You're such a tease! ;) Saw the F/F and M/F/F warning now. How did I miss that? You're totally hitting all of my kinks. I was going to say all you need to do was throw in Draco, but I see he's a pairing in there as well.

Chapter 11 was very interesting. The smut was hot, loved the idea of Kreacher talking to both of them while they're asleep, and am looking forward to Ginny entering the picture.

The chapter was interesting in another way as well. You are really researching every aspect of this fic as well as delving into the psychology of everything that's happening to our girl. It's so different from most of the stories here because this isn't just a wank-fic. Yes, I know you're throwing every kink in here (except necrophilia, thank you, please don't) but it's still a very emotional piece as well. You are awful to Hermione and I find beginning to feel a tiny nugget of guilt for enjoying what's happening. I know it's a fic and she's having orgasm after orgasm, but you know what I mean. I hope. I wanted Remus to kill Sirius in this chapter and now I noticed the pregnancy warning too! That poor, poor girl will never be normal again and I hope Sirius and Kreacher get disembowled.

Wow, where did that come from? I will shut up now. Bring on the dubious consent femmeslash! :)
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From ANON - soniab on December 07, 2008
Great chapter. Poor bloody Remus, I was so glad that he wasn't killed. Hermione is screwed for life. I can't see her ever coming out of this situation without having permanent psychological damage.

I really do wish there was some way of being alerted when you put a new chapter up as I have this story saved in my favourites, but don't check it regularly enough.

Oh, one thing that is bothering me (only a little) is the fact that Hermione isn't pregnant yet... or is she?

Keep up the great work.

Love Sonia :)
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From ANON - Altasia on December 06, 2008
OMG. After reading that last chapter you MUST do RL!Mind Control/HG/SB sex. So hot.
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From ANON - JordenK on December 04, 2008
Hi! New reader here. I've only gotten read the first three chapters and am enjoying most of it. I love mind control fics, so the whole sleeping commands and whispers and fondling at the beginning was uber-hot, (sublinimals=guh) but I did skip over some of the acts in the third chapter. Didn't realize I'd get squicked so quickly. (And after reading the above review and rereading your warnings, looks like I'll tread carefully in future chapters.)

You've got a lot of pairings coming up, so that's neat. (Does VW=Ginny?) Woo-hoo for mind control and F/F/M and sex magic, but some of the harder stuff, has me worried. I'm torn between that's so hot and interesting psychology and OMG I cannot believe I'm reading this. I'm quick on my scroll bar though, so I'm not worried. Well, too much. ;) Rock on.
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From Elphaba on December 04, 2008
It took me FOREVER to read this chapter! It was excellent (I was reading at work) You did a great job! Loved Remus figuring out and Siri confessing on accident. Love the control over Kreacher.
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From ANON - roxie on December 04, 2008
Thank you for the psychological discussion in this chapter and showing that Sirius is somewhat aware of the long term impact of his behavior. Having Remus demonstrate his morals by refusing to participate was good. I was thinking that they couldn't have been that vigilant about getting rid of the smells, thank you for addressing that as well. He did get obliviated right? It didn't say explicitly if he did or not so I am just assuming.

I was a little frustrated when I read that you plan to have 30 chapters in this story. The chapters are long and, while some of the stuff is kinky and provocative and I enjoy it, I can't help but feel that this is a never ending story. You said that it's gonna get darker before it gets better, but I am kinda thinking that being covered with excrement, forced to eat it, while being forced to have sex with an animal and beaten is pretty dark already. Is the goal to cover every dirty depraved disgusting act known to mankind in this one story?

Including Severus sounds interesting, especially with the animosity between him and Sirius. Do you have to make him a bad guy? Can't he be a little more sane than Sirius is, cause that guy is nuts!

I like your writing style and I am really into this story, I look for updates everyday!
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