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By : SaitouLover
  • From ANON - Debbie on November 09, 2013
    good story just started reading.
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  • From ANON - lovelock8 on November 01, 2013
    I really love your story. It's so steamy and got interesting plot. For the steamy part: please don't rush to completion. I noticed many good stories going downhill fast after that. Also, think abut your measurements - if Sev's cock is 3 inches thick then it would be reasonable that he wouldn't introduce that size or larger plugs especially before first penetration. After all, everyone likes a tight hole... And though magic and potions can probably easily fix it I believe that i is more likely to happen after at least few rolls in the hay, as a result of search for further thrills. Oh, and I'd love to see a slight dom/sub content if you're into it (spanking, nipple torture bondage etc) - of course introduced very gradually.
    As for the plot: it certainly caught my attention though I think it may be hard for you to find serious obstacles for Sev in his plans due to that obedience potion. Maybe you should limit its spread somehow i.e make it so it has to be keyed into a particular person, or make the brewing time insanely long... Up to you; just few hopefully helpful suggestions for you. Also, try not to create massive monologue parts (like when Sev explains old ways). I know that you need to further the plot but you can sneak some info through books, overheard conversations, observation etc. It just gets very dry when it's served in spades like that.
    I m looking forward to further development of your story. Please take the criticism the way it was meant - lightly :P


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  • From ANON - redaerara on October 26, 2013
    Hi, I don
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  • From ANON - De on October 25, 2013
    Guess you still have writers block? Since its been nearly or more than a month since the last update?
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  • From drgnkissez on September 19, 2013
    I Like The Way You'r Story is Going it is Very Entertaining And I Like The Plot But You Haven't Written Anything About Harry's Owl And Since I Like Magical Animals I Would Like To See More Of Them
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  • From Tamafluff on September 15, 2013
    T.T When will you update?????? Need...Yaoi...PLEASE!
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  • From ANON - TheBlindApprentice on September 13, 2013
    Hi,
    I've been on the edges, reading this story for a while.
    Admittedly, my weirded out state has wared with my curiosity, therefore I keep coming back.
    I find this story fascinating and am enjoying the intricacy of it.
    Hoping you are well and will be glad to help in any way I am able.
    The blind apprentice
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  • From ANON - Melissa on September 12, 2013
    You have to continue the snarry goodness. You plot is awesom!!! I check like every day to see if a new chapter is up
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  • From ANON - mmagicwolf on September 07, 2013
    I really enjoy this story. It has depth, a realistic history to back up events, and characters that feel alive.

    That being said, I read your most recent chapter and reread parts of the story to refresh my memory. Are you aware that you contradicted yourself a little? In chapter 9 you had Severus inform Filius that he had already dosed the entire Weasley clan except for Arthur and then in chapter 14 said that Arthur needed to dose his eldest children and his wife. I am not certain if that was on purpose or if I just misread the two parts.

    I hope that your writers block disappears completely and that your life allows you to continue writing because I really truly want to know what happens in this world that you have crafted. I look forward to see how Severus will continue to bind Harry to himself. Will Severus enjoy piercing Harry, or will Harry be tied up and pleasured till he falls unconscious. In the next chapter I hope to find Harry again in compromising positions. Grin.

    If it is possible please update soon!
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  • From Snarrys_love_slave_BDSM on September 07, 2013
    Omg omg omg I love it I thank you for updating I'm praticly crying I really hope your next chapter won't take so long go update but oh well you are the author sigh. I will be wating impationtly for your next chapter. It such a good storie oh and I hope the next chapter will have some more lemony goodness oh and some angushy moments you need to cause some drama. Like throw in some chick (ginny or cho) whom will try to steal harry away from his lovely severus. I will cause quite a stir oh and try to get dumbles to fuck with harry and snape so we can bash him and ron fuck just bash ron till he's dead (hate ron such a pig head) but any who I'm rambling. So yeah please please give us more I love it.

    Your devoted crazy ron hateing ginny bashing snarry loveing fan,

    NLM Snarrys_love_slave_BDSM
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  • From ANON - Sera21 on September 07, 2013
    AH! An update at long last! What an amazing chapter although I'm a bit saddened at the lack of Smut...this backround info is really interesting! However I do have to wonder why Voldie didn't sense anything in Sev???
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  • From Tamafluff on September 07, 2013
    I have just recently started reading your story and haven't been able to stop until I reached the end of the most recent chapter!! I can't wait til you update, but more importantly I love how controlling Snape is! I'm usually a Drarry fan but I'm considering that Snarry is more kinky then the former :) love the work! one thing I don't particularly enjoy is how "weak" Harry seems most of the time....I can understand the submissive part with Snape, but the rest of the time? He's a lion acting like a mouse! lol Please don't take this the wrong way I truly do enjoy this story, only trying to give you helpful feed back
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  • From dragonLuv3 on September 06, 2013
    OMG this story gets better an better every time i LOVE your long chapters an the twist an turns you take us on, keep up the amazing job :)
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  • From ANON - Lily on September 06, 2013
    I have been following this story for a while - one complaint, more updates please!!!!

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  • From ANON - Deb on September 05, 2013
    What no Harry? Boo! Lol good chapter...I'd like to hear more of Severus' thoughts, especially regarding Harry. From this chapter and previous ones he seems to care more about controlling Harry and having his body...not Harry himself. I'd like to think he cares at least a little bit. I do love a complicated Severus but now I'd like to see what he really thinks of Harry as a person not his magic or looks. Can we hear more about why he was wanting to get in touch with petunia regarding the will and finding out about the cupboard? And the rest of the abuse. also why he chose the method of punishment he did...and why so long? three hours of constant agony is harsh! you have to admit. As possessive as Severus seems why hasn't he dealt with the Dursely's? Anyone that's hurt what he perceives as his I'd imagine him dealing with them harshly.
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