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By : evil-minded
  • From JeanMcIory on October 18, 2012
    finally, I already thought that Severus would never undress in front of Harry, that would have become a strange relationship
    and a marriage - sorry, bonding - that's so great! I love it! may I come too? will they go to a honeymoon? I'm so happy!
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on October 14, 2012
    I am so happy with the way this story is going...I just love it! Poor abused & neglected Harry and poor under rated but used by & for Dumbledore, Voldie & everyones' advantage unloved Severus need each other and fit so well!! And now they are begining to show how much they care for each other & bonding? Yea!!
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  • From bloodshound on October 13, 2012
    spotted two typos. intimidate instead of intimate and mute instead of moot.
    wow, i thought this was teaching relationship? Why is sev pushing for a bonding so quickly? Is that normal for a teaching bond? Rushing like that is not really like Snape and is it such a good idea to bond with Voldie still out there? I think back at the start the very reason har started this was because he didn't want to die without knowing love and war could very well kill him.
    I agree, it's highly unlikely that har would turn total hero boy after being kicked around by the dursleys and jerked around by dumbles. He might put up a very good front but that's all it would be, a front and one that would get knocked down sooner or later.
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  • From JeanMcIory on October 08, 2012
    want more! I'Ve run out of next-buttons
    hope it's soon friday, great chappy again
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  • From JeanMcIory on October 08, 2012
    what a chapter (glares at Sera) it's a great chapter and a great story and I love it, and I think, you have described the reactions from an abused child very well, keep up your way of writing!
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  • From JeanMcIory on October 08, 2012
    that was a very long and complicated chapter, but it was worth the read, I've nearly cried
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  • From JeanMcIory on October 08, 2012
    I agree with Steve, nice to have some actions started
    loved the chappy :D
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  • From ANON - jujukitty on October 08, 2012
    awww, poor thing. at least he's finally starting to trust sev with the truth, now if he'll just let sev help him in return. another wonderful chapter, keep up the good work :)
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  • From SteveSettler on October 08, 2012
    that was such a sweet chapter, the care both feel for each other, even Harry caring for Severus despite that it should be the other way round
    I loved it and I am really looking forwards to the next chapter
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  • From SteveSettler on October 08, 2012
    I know how difficult such a chapter surely had to be, but you've managed really well
    loved it

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  • From SteveSettler on October 08, 2012
    a sad chapter, but it shows what child abuse does to a child
    great work, really
    on to the next chapter
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  • From SteveSettler on October 08, 2012
    good that for once Ron is punisehd
    nice that some action starts, can't wait for more
    great chapter to a great story
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  • From Sera21 on October 08, 2012
    Wow, I can only say you really went to town on poor Harry. No food, no love, no family, no friends, no clothes. I mean he practically had all the bad stuff happen to him...one does have to wonder why nobody at his previous school said anything and I wondered about the food he has to choose from everyday in teh great hall at hogwarts....and at feasts! how does he do that? I do feel like you are playing the abused card a smidgen to hard. I mean I know that real people and kids get abused every day. But gosh, he is CONSTANTLY startled or afraid or cringing. What in the world did u do with teh brave, corageous Harry from teh books???
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  • From Sera21 on October 07, 2012
    and come to think of it where does Ron want to go "out" with Harry to?? They are not allowed to leave the grounds except on Hogsmead weekends for the afternoon. So where exactly would they "go out " to? The forbidden forest to...look at the trees? Hagrids? But then he would have said that. Maybe its because the wording is strange but in english you only say you want to " go out" with somebody if you want to go on a date...
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  • From Sera21 on October 06, 2012
    So far I am up to chapter 4 and from what I am reading you are doing a really good job. Even your grammer and spelling is very good for a 2nd language speaker/writer of english. I did notice you used teh word hair instead of heir and teh phrase " sacked together " which isn't a english phrase( Are you german? " Er sackte zusammen" perhaps?) . I like that you are taking it slowly and letting Harry discover things at his own pace. I do question Severus as to why he would assume to tell Harry about BDSM when all Harry asked for was a basic sex lesson. Could have been done in 10 minutes really and there was no reason to assume Harry would even be interested in BDSM and teh pain aspect at that point. But I guess you have to get there at some point so this was okay. I really really dislike the point that harry thinks his friends only like him for the fame. I mean thats like you just looked at teh entire Harry Potter series and said Fuck you :( The whole series is about friendship and teh prevailing power of love. I find it incredibly hard to believe that the harry from the books is the one in this story saying evrybody thinks he's a freak and his friends only like him for the fame. I mean sure, some people probably do think that but we have never had any reason to believe his friends are not the pillars of support and love they are in teh books. You are not the only author who has done this but it is really a cheap and easy way out and from the quality and depth of your writing I expected more...
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