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From risotto on March 06, 2010
Lol i really look forward to seeing hermione speaking with her cool cup.
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From risotto on March 06, 2010
Ah nice! 2 updates waiting for me! Reading on!
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From JaceDamian23 on March 02, 2010

As if to vent her anger, she grabbed him by his shirt and pulled on it, successfully ripping it apart. With satisfaction, she listened to the sounds of the buttons flying off in different directions and hitting different things in the room.

His eyes slightly darkened at her actions, and she quirked an eyebrow at him, as if she was daring him. In a sensual, lithe move, he lifted his lower body and rested it on the side against the line of hers. His left leg entangled with hers, while her left arm was caught underneath his armpit
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From JaceDamian23 on March 02, 2010

"Why, thank you, Granger," he finally said oh so softly, barely breaking that delicious silence. He drew his fingers over the cup, caressing it gently. "You have been most helpful and ... Lord Voldemort always rewards those who serve him well."

He took the cup in his hand and lifted it to his lips, giving it a teasing kiss and laughing when he felt it shudder.

"You really are a good little servant, honey. Lord Voldemort will remember this when he lays judgement on you in the end."

good part

Perhaps he should Crucio the entire Granger line into insanity before they drove him there?
LOL

A soft cough made her freeze.

Oh no! No, no, no, no, no. This wasn't happening. My mother didn't just walk in on me making out with a bloke on her couch. Thank Merlin, my father isn't in.

Her face flushed in embarrassment, she tried to wiggle off Tom's lap, but he held onto her with a devious grin. "You really don't want to turn around now," he whispered to her lips.

"Hello, Monica," her father's voice sounded behind her, "and who have we here?"

Hermione groaned and stared at Tom in horror. "You can always Obliviate this from their memory," he suggested mischievously. "Though, I recommend doing it after you fed them the potion."

All she did was close her eyes and bang her head against his shoulder. Life was so unfair

LMAFO great scene. amusing as hell lol

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From Kayrox133 on February 28, 2010
That totally sucks to have those memories with Voldemort gone. Sigh... I loved that scene and that Voldemort almost lost control. Ha! And he was claimed by Hermione! Harry made a very poor decision to look in the Pensieve.
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From ANON - hero_jaejoong on February 27, 2010
is it just me..or is the room getting more than just a tad hotter? (sighing) finally, tom on top. just where i needed him to be....
again another amazing chapter.. i almost didn't miss reading new chapters of 'apprentice' (nerys-hint.hint.hint)
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From TheLadyMiya on February 27, 2010
Yeeees! I've been waiting and waiting for a new chapter! WIIIH!
YEES! They are in bed! FINALLY!
"You stole my wand," she accused - Well, she did stole his first ;)
"For some reason, his actions excited her," -What do you mean "for some reason"? The guy is hot and passionate and are clearly about to fuck you! What is there not to be excited about???
I looove the power-strugle between them, both wanting to be on top. Wonder what Hermione will think about the evil glint in Tom's eyes when they aren't in the heat of passion anymore. Or if she even will remember it...
""I'm yours," she conceded with a nod before she tilted her head slightly to one side and lowered her tone to a hiss, "but you ... belong to me."" - Noooow we're getting somewhere! They do belong together!
""My Lord!"" - What. The. Fuck? Oooh, is she remembering the dream-altered-reality-thingy?
OOOOH!OOOOH!OOOH! SHE KNOWS! SHE FIGURED IT OUT!
"The fact that she was naked and still in his arms, while his cock softened inside of her, made a furious blush appear on her cheeks." - I actually don't blame her... er... that has to be veeeeery embarrassing. Me like :D
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO! He did that curse again :( Darn him! It's much more fun when Hermione knows... But hooot smut scene. I really like how you mix their feelings and thought together with their actions, so it isn't just "he touched her here, she climaxed there". That gets boring after a while...
"he wasn't going to just take Granger's word on what was the right approach for him to take with the silly, redheaded, uptight maiden." - Ug... I knew it was too good to be true. I just hope Harry will react like Tom wants him to react, so he will let Ginny go. Ooh, but I'm wondering what is it he will show Harry... iiich! Another cliffy! You mean, mean girls! Although, I assume it's something completely garishly in those memories. Poor Harry. And then Ginny will have to live with the belief that they have actually happened! Iiish! That isn't very good either. I wonder what Hermione will say... oh, well. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! I want to know what happens! Gimme!
Otherwise, excellent chapter. Of course. I'm a sucker for smut, as you know ;) Keep on writing!
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From risotto on February 24, 2010
Weeee hot stuff! Me like! Me want more!
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From risotto on February 24, 2010
Bad bad riddle...so hes planning to bring down the whole weasley family eh.
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From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2010
*Miya has split herself into two and are sneaking around the authors houses. She sneaks up to the windows and sees the authors doing something besides writing! Furiously does her two parts take stolen wands and aim it at the authors* Imperio! Write on the Gold Puppet! Go through if you have already written chapter 15 and edit it so you can post it! Then, post chapter 15! GIVE ME AN UPDATE!
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From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2010
DAMN, FUCKING BlOODY HELL! THIS FUCKING COMPUTER IS MAKING ME WANT TO KILL IT!
I had almost finished the review, when it did something and decided that now was a good time to shut down. BAH!
Okay, I started with how Brilliant plan Hermione has come up with, even if it's sad that it's on the expense of Harry's and Ginny's relationship. Although, I'm sure Harry would do the same... he is after all, always the hero. So yay! Cup!Hermione managed to save Ginny's sanity anyway. I'm happy.
Then we get to see Hermione standing in front of her parent's new house. This actually brought tears to my eyes :( Poor Hermione. But I can see how she is doubtful, I mean, she has spent almost half her life away from them. I don't see how parents would want to send their children away (well, unless they were troublesome) at the age of 11! And how come JK never mentions any home-sickness? I mean, sure, Harry has nothing to miss, but I'm sure Hermione and Ron loves their parents, so how come they never mention it? Weird.
Oh, well, good thing Tom showed up. However, doesn't seem like Hermione is suspicious. I know I would have been. Oh, well, we have already stated that her brain stops working every time Tom is around, haha.
That part with them kissing on the couch made me almost pee my pants with laughter. It's ALWAYS funny when someone else gets in those type of embarrassing situation.
Ohh, and some Ron-bashing! That's always fun. But yes, he is a bloody coward most of the time... and selfish...
"Seth, on the other hand, had always been understanding, intelligent, kind, supportive, charming, handsome." - Well, intelligent, charming and handsome anyway...
Oooh, yes, punish the naughty boy for not sending an owl! SPANKING! SPANKING! SPANKING!
NO! BAD, BAD AUTHORS! You can't stop right there! I have our Lord on my side and he is demanding you to update RIGHT NOW! GIVE US SMUT! BAH!
Okay, something is really wrong with my computer... I can't seem to copy anything. :S Let's hope you can get this review then...
Great chapter!

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From ANON - mel on February 22, 2010
yay! hahah yes that was really fast:) thanks!!! i seriously check all the time to see if you updated lol. i love this story!
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From Kayrox133 on February 21, 2010
Ahh cliffie! I can't wait to see what is coming next and I am loving that Hermione took control. It's so nice to see a Hermione that uses her brain and her wand. And who wouldn't want to make out with Tom in a pub? He he he I loved how Ron the schmuck saw everything!
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From ANON - hero_jaejoong on February 21, 2010
hi again...another fabulous chapter. how pissed do you think tommy gonna be when he realized he's been skillfully manipulated by cup!hermione into releasing Ginny? anyone for very very pissed?(raised hand and jumped up and down ecstatically).

i still dont understand why tom isnt searching a new way to gain immortality. (rereading 2nd chpter) i get that he turn hermione into horocrux and making hermione somewhat immortal, pushing his own horocrux out, so he can be whole being plus the other fragmented soul that fought with harry before joining him. but i thought harry and the gang already destroyed the rest of his horocrux, so he couldnt be immortal due to his horocrux. that's why in the first book he wanted to get the philosophe's stone, since philosopher's stone extend your life span but horocrux do not, you can still die but the other horocrux you made will release the soul inside so you can be alive again. maybe i'm just thinking about this too much...

ps: about the favour...its nothing big- atleast i dont think it is... if you guys could put it somewhere in next chapters (with "s", i'm not choosy which chapter you decide to put this in) the curse words "oh, fuck-on-stick!!" and "fuckity fuck fuck".... i'm trying to spread the love...
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From ANON - VoldyLuv2 on February 21, 2010
I liked this story for its writing style so I read your other one, The Apprentice. I personally enjoyed the story line of The Apprentice more. The Gold Puppet just feels like it is going on and on and not really going anywhere exciting. I am really excited about what might happen in The Apprentice though. But you probably have plans for The Gold Puppet that will be surprising so I will definitely keep reading it. Just don't drop The Apprentice because it is a good story as well.
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