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From ANON - LeWyKi on June 07, 2016
Did you not say something about light being shed...? All I can see is being led from the shadows into even more darkness of the labyrinth of this story's mysteries. Sure, it is entirely possible to draw some conclusions from this ending - that yes, they did have some kind of connection/relationship before - during the war? - and perhaps either of the two, most likely Snape, decided to use a well-placed obliviate on Hermione but as with her parents, the memories were not erased. They were only suppressed coming back to haunt her in vague dreams, random impressions and emotions. Alas, this is just one out of multiple scenarios I might imagine. So is this what you call shedding light on the issue? On the other hand, you got them together again and truly fast, at that. Also, I like that this time it was him arriving at her doorstep unannounced. It only seems fair when talking about two headstrong and yet insecure people. One always needs to start and it had better not always be the same person lest it become habit. Soooooo, I like it :) So much for the set up of the whole scene. That scene itself just proves again how talented a wordsmith you are. Once more we get to read a chapter that is equal parts amusing inner monologue as it is powerful and deeply emotional, not to forget erotic. Now, what will you give us to speculate about, next?
And thank you for the vote of confidence on my English skills - let my 'vast' experience of three months spent in the UK, two years ago, along with fanfic and English movies speak for itself ;) ...only to get nowhere, really. What you might have noticed, is my erratic use of commas and prepositions. I am always unsure about these. I believe, it is mostly the reading that helped a lot, so far. Starting in 3rd grade with books in German, I discovered fanfiction after school, only to notice that there were far more stories in English - and what is an avid reader to do, but to read on?
Anyway, it is winter for you - in June?! I mean, I knew that - theoretically - but I find it so hard to imagine, because the almighty internet makes distances, however great, seem nonexistent. However, I can relate to the 'flooding rain'. We get quite a lot of rain all year long, nevermind what kind of weather is to be expected from the current time of the year. For the strawberries, it was even useful - we had a few days of sporadic, but intense rainfall and from then on sunny no-cloud-in-the-sky weather. - Why on earth am I doing the 'weather-talk' online? It is certainly too late for me to be awake. I'll stop my rambling now. Thank you for another wonderful chapter!
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From OracleObscured on June 07, 2016
A comma splice is a comma placed between two complete sentences. Like--The dog chased the cat, he wanted to play. That should be a period (or a semicolon, or possibly an em dash, or else it needs a connecting word so it makes sense).
Oh, yes. I love a desperately lustful Snape. Excellent chapter. Super hot ravaging is always welcome.
"consumed her in ravenous mouthfuls."-- Love this.
"Smouldering eyes cauterising hers"--You are starting to freak me out. I used cauterized in Q too. Stop reading my mind!
"Definitely sorely, fuck!!"--Snort.
(heavily lidded--hyphenate)
"In fact, it felt more like an oral worship of her lips, face and neck, leaving her gasping like she�d just engaged in a spot of deep sea diving, and him with another deliciously tumescent member jostling inside the dewy chamber of her pussy."--Loved the kiss worship and, for some reason, "tumescent member jostling inside the dewy chamber . . . "
(build-up is one word)
"Ensheathed"--Word notebook.
Whaaaaat the fuuuuuck! So the hospital scene was real . . . and something more happened. Oh God, was she in love with him then? If she's not supposed to remember, I'm guessing he cast a memory charm on her. But I'm also guessing it might not have been his idea. So she wanted to forget. And that's part of why she's so fucked up--her life is wrong without him. I can think of lots of reasons she might want to forget, but I'm still eager to discover why he blew up the book. I'm not patient at all. You're going to update again before going grading, aren't you?
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From ANON - DawnEB on June 07, 2016
What just happened at the end there? What is the mystery, what is it that Severus knows but Hermione seems unaware of? Please, please, PLEASE update soon, I need to know more!
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From ANON - LeWyKi on June 06, 2016
Wait a minute! Did you change the POV, there? A rare occurrence, if there ever was one. And, I have to admit, one I truly appreciate. It is nice for me as a reader, to know both of their thought processes and actions, even when they're not in each others company. On the other hand, this way we know more than Hermione does and might be temtpted to think of things as obvious or given, that she cannot know with any certainty or at all. I can imagine that despite his insight, Snape is another person prone to overthinking - especially when it comes to interpersonal relationships...Well, he is the older of the two and has therefore collected more (varied) experiences to draw on for interpretation, but first comes the emotional impact, then the overthinking and afterwards some more emotion. Let us say, I liked this chapter immensely, even though I got to read it just now (busy weekend and start into the week). Thank you for your prolific writing! :) And what are you going to do about the mysterious legilimency/telepathy between these two? Now we have not just Hermione's issues, but also Snape's and their shared history to deal with - hopefully there will be some rewarding resolution in the end ;) (fine, when has there ever NOT been one, in addition to various in-betweens, nevermind, why am I asking?)

As to my studies and such: Yes, Europe would be correct - more specifically, Germany, the eastern part of it. The 5 years are the regular time for most studies, but if one part takes you longer or you want to study abroad for a semester or two, the whole thing may go on and on ...8 years, you say. How did that work? Were there specific parts in your course of study and was it clear from the beginning, that it would take this long? The only students I know, who usually have to study for this period of time are the medical students, because they practically have to do their Doctorate right after finishing their 5-year diploma to be taken serious as a "real" medical doctor by future patients... Anyway, we're currently having some very hot and sunny days, which led to me and two of my siblings picking 5 kg of strawberries on sunday. Our mum had invited some friends over, so we had ice cream and strawberries, strawberry milkshake or just plain strawberries all day long and finished the last of them this morning.

Enough talk about things you probably didn't actually want to know this much in detail. Thank you for the quick update and as ever, I am looking forward to any and all future updates.
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From OracleObscured on June 05, 2016
Hahaha! I had to look up the tailed/trailed thing for my own sanity.
"and what makes you think I do?"--Snort. Silly me.
Fav lines this time were
"on the rickshaw of her chattering teeth."--Love the comparison.
"more of a Frankenstein of impressions that were cobbled together from her years of interactions with him"Frankenstein of impressions was great, and cobbled made it even better.
(between them but she needed it, she was there for forgiveness after all.--I would change that comma to an em dash. It's too comma splicey as is.)
Dammit, I loved the whole hand job scene. I won't copy and paste it all.
"where he placed two fingers on her cheek,"--This is brilliant. Just in case there was any confusion about whom her story involved, she's made it quite clear with that one gesture.
Oh my God. That was the most excellent cliffy ever. Now, I'm dying to see what happens next. More so than usual.
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From dezzu on June 04, 2016
Really, really enjoyed the last two chapters. Can't believe the pace you're cranking these out at, though I'm not complaining!
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From OracleObscured on June 04, 2016
I looked it up--tailed off and trailed off mean the same thing. I'd just never heard it before. (Ignorance for the win.) "LOL! I love the cheer squad."--Did I ever tell you that I used to be a cheerleader? For two years. I never yelled for anyone to thrust into a smirk, but that sounds far more entertaining. (Or maybe I was just cheering for the wrong event.) "I know someone who could fix that for you � he might be able to fix a few other things too" Are you referring to your brother? Is he an EKG specialist? (I don't recall you telling me what he does.) And I told you, I don't do beards. (Plus I don't think his tongue would reach this far.) And you should definitely watch The Sandlot. I don't know if it's your taste, but it's sweet and funny and worth seeing.
"It sounds like a Hannibal Lecter meal � with some fava beans and a nice chianti (you�ll have to finish the final bit, I can�t spell it)."--Hahahahaha! I guess that would be Ft-ft-ft-ft-ft-ft.
"to instantly feel her bare skin being flayed by the heat of his predatory gaze"--Yeeees! Flayed.
"but were also shit-scared and trying their best not to tremble against his billowing breast."--I think I liked the sudden blunt honesty of shit-scared amongst all the pretty prose.
"elicited a guttural groan dredged up from somewhere around his bollocks,"--Love this. All groans should come from the balls.
"closing her eyes as his unyielding measure seared between her lips, grinding her clitoris like a pestle of flesh."--I don't know if I liked "unyielding measure" better or "pestle of flesh."
(She sucked at he plunged--as he plunged?)
"Colossus of Cocks"--Eighth wonder of the world.
(her head pitching back against him--I spy.)
(but knew he was probably only half way or less--halfway is one word.)
"twat not to get too excited with the interior re-design"--Hahahahaha! I need some redecorating myself. I'll have to rent a jackhammer.
"And then he redefined what happiness was.
One thing she realised about a massive cock was that it didn�t leave a lot to the imagination. It was all there, every bump and ridge, reaming against her walls. And it felt fucking incredible."--I love all of this.
"internal termination point of each beautifully timed swing of his hips."--I think I liked the description of swing of his hips. Visual and visceral.
"she felt her innards about to capsize"--Capsize. Yessss. I used this in Q (not the way you did). (BTW, I forgot to tell you, guess what I found in chapter 37. Fuck fuck fuckity fuck. I read it maybe two days after we'd talked about it and cracked up when I saw it.)
"His voice felt so close, almost cosseted in the chamber of her ear."--Mmmmmm, cosseted.
"to fuck her even more comprehensively than she�d hoped"--All fucking should be comprehensive. I love that.
"relentlessly peppered with the stinging spray."--Peppered made stinging spray even better.
I still have no idea what's going on in this story. Does Snape think she's just doing all this for the book? What is going on? Don't answer that (except with another chapter). Looking forward to whatever you've got coming next (no pun intended).
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From ANON - LeWyKi on June 04, 2016
Glutton for punishment? To me, it seems more like the natural progression of things on my way to becoming a scientist. After all, I do love learning and understanding just about anything (if you do not count economy or politics). Where I live, studies always used to take five years to complete, with both basic and specific knowledge to be learned. It has only been a few years, since the BA/MA scheme has been introduced and adopted here and some studies like medicine, pharmacy or becoming a teacher still take the whole five (or more) years without the BA/MA separation.
On to the story:
Okay, that was one lovely chapter. Even made me laugh at times :) - your vivid descriptive language is hilarious in places, as are Hermiones "pep talks to her various body parts". And there he goes again, with the hand on cheek - wonder how long it will be, until she actually asks about it - seems like a reluctant goodbye, but is it? One more question: Now what? Well. Theoretically, she will now go home, start (over)thinking again, fall asleep sometime along the way and wake up to a delivery of the remaining pages for the book - by hand or by owl, I wonder?. Next, she'll have to make all the material into one real-looking book and then, in the evening, would be their last meeting out of necessity: to hand in the book. All in all, one day left where they will have to meet at some point and might establish further meetings - perhaps a celebration afterwards? A lot more might happen during that day. What have you planned for us? I guess there will be a chance to read about it, soon enough :)
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From ANON - LeWyKi on June 01, 2016
Hey there - that one was fast (again, not sure why that still surprises me :) Thanks, and a good average was necessary for my application (currently working on that) for the MA studies, so yes, I was somewhat relieved. The experiment did turn out to be some fun. The results also managed to practically reverse my initial hypothesis, but that just means the topic bears further exploring...anyway, on to the story: No, so far, your settings haven't been predictable. I am just always surprised to read HP-stories with little to no magic in their setting - the literal kind, that is ;) As for my summary - it just illustrates my personal development over the last few months: Working out the key points of whatever material and extrapolating from there on has become entirely too common for me. After finishing my own, I am now helping my youngest brother with a report of his and another friend in writing her thesis...well. And no, it is not your stories, that are predictable - rather these are the parts that stories seem to be made up of in general. What makes a story good or annoying is how the author chooses to fill these parts with content, language - their own personal brand of storytelling. And I simply like your style of writing quite a lot. This pairing may have some influence, but others like it (take Pride and Prejudice or Emma, for example) make for the most interesting dynamics, generally. Thus, they are really worth reading. Or something. That is just my own personal opinion. A little (or a lot) conflict, some chemistry and you will certainly see if the couple suits. I remember some comedian saying once "Dinner dates are such a useless practice - after all, what do you learn of your date? Their eating habits or that they are able to use cutlery appropriately? If you truly wish to get to know each other, simply meet to purposefully drive right into a large traffic jam and see how each of you deals with stressful situations" Fitting, I believe...ahhh, off topic again.
On to the new chapter: Firstly, something formal - One thing I noticed is, that you have (by accident, I think) tripled "had" somewhere in the middle..."he�d had had a difficult and traumatic life"... I do believe that is one "had" too many ;)
And secondly, for the content - The intrigue is back - greetings, old friend! Once free of outward influences that brain of hers has taken up its rapid and plentiful work again. Too bad, the conclusions she might come to are not necessarily correct. Still, having realized her own interest in his person(ality) and that actively taking up the role of the brave little lioness is a nice development. And the reward for bravery... somehow I don't think there will be any complaints about that point:) And what have we there in the end? Another mystery? Telepathy? You certainly manage to keep a reader wondering.
Now, I'd say that is enough chatter, for now.
Happy writing (and working breaks) for you!
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From OracleObscured on May 31, 2016
Holy. Fucking. Hell. This chapter was beyond good. I am swimming in words. And I think my heart's going to pound out of my chest. I was way too wrapped up in this; I felt like everything was happening to me. From a writing stance I think that's outstanding; from an adrenal sense, I need to calm the fuck down.
Everything is getting deeper; and I love it. In fact, most of my favorite parts this time were chosen because of how they sucked me into the experience and made me feel.
"She still couldn�t get used to the idea of calling him by his first name so it seemed a little bizarre for the space beside her to feel so empty."--I love this. The heart-tugging loneliness is contrasted wonderfully with her discomfort with calling him by his first name.
"And the passion with which he wrote made her believe that his romantic notions hailed from a deep place, somewhere genuine and, ultimately, vulnerable despite the sexual confidence that he seemed to possess."--Fuuuuuuck. This is so beautiful. I don't know what else to say.
(She admonished herself from being fucking ridiculous but it didn�t stop her from feeling miserable.--That from should be for.)
"Dredging up a breath from the soles of her feet"--Excellent.
"The frown that sliced through his brow was made all the more severe by the shadow of the dungeons"--I love the visual this conjures, and sliced was the perfect verb.
"feel the crimson flush rolling up her throat." Again, you made a simple image so much better with one word: rolling.
("female perspective on . . . � she tailed off."--Did you mean trailed off?)
"the way she would have liked to �proceed� was by thrusting her tongue into the vague smirk on his lips"--Do it, do it, do it! Thrusting into a vague smirk sounds delicious.
"Then she placed his palm against her cheek, her eyes not wavering from his despite her roiling heart."--Aaaaaaand my heart palpitations just blew up the EKG.
"tilting her head back until she could feel his teeth bared at the curve of her jaw."--You're killin' me, Smalls. (Sorry, I was watching The Sandlot yesterday.)
"a welcome plume of steam rising from behind the frosted glass door."--Love this visual. It's almost tactile.
"He wants you to get your gear off, �Mione. Yes, I worked that out myself actually, thank you very much."--Snort. I love Hermione's inner monologue.
"he guided her backwards until the rigid column in his trousers was firmly ensconced between her denim-clad buttocks"--Ensconced. Yessssss. And now I need to go back into some furniture and reenact this.
"extruded each nipple"--Extruded made me love this.
"And we supped upon her sweet nectar, avaricious and awash with desire"--Dammit. Word pimp Snape knows just how to hit my word clit just right. Avaricious almost sent me over the edge.
(It took a moment for his words to sink in before she suddenly wihtdrew and turned her face to his. --Withdrew.)
(that of his cock which was still embedded in her backside.--Comma before which.)
And now I suspect that he's hearing her thoughts. Is she hearing his? Is he really saying the "prose" out loud? Don't tell me! What is going on? Don't tell me that either!
Oh, and I almost forgot your A/N. "I keep thinking I see members on the street."--I keep thinking I see them between my thighs. Much more entertaining. "This makes me think we should write something together . . . what do you think?"--I think it's brilliant. You're not too busy, are you? I know you have lots of prostate hyperplasia on your plate. (And paramedic pythons to wrangle.) :)
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From dezzu on May 30, 2016
Really loved the latest chapter! Laughed so hard at the term "pussyquake" XP
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From ANON - LeWyKi on May 30, 2016
Wow, is that another story? I'd say you've been a very diligent writer, these last few months :-) Me too - only, I had to. Having - finally! - finished my bachelor degree last week and fortunately with an A in average, I am now back to reading...and other unimportant stuff like work etc. And well, first you finished "In their Hands" and now another shift to an entirely new Snape and Hermione. Not that it seems entirely impossible, but for me it is a rather unexpected setting. Anyway, as with your other stories, so far it has been very much worth reading and somehow I managed to get on it right when you've reached a (seemingly) crucial point in your tale. Well, it is interesting to read something, that is already about half or more (if I am not mistaken) complete. Sooo, now that we 1)got to know the main characters' current situations 2) introduced a starting conflict 3) uncovered some of their life's history and mysteries and 4) tentatively began heading in the "feeling" and "emotional" direction, with the two starting to relate to each other...what is there to come? A book to be finished, some steps toward a personal relationship to be taken - perhaps, considering who the main actors are, a few conflicts and a pinch of miscommunication added - all towards a better understanding of each other...or something. Let us say, I'm anticipating any and all new chapters ;-)
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From OracleObscured on May 28, 2016
Fucking hell, that was a good chapter. Superb writing and descriptions. My pussy is so jealous.
"murky mire where all of her worst memories festered like infected sores"--Alliteration and similes, and festered. Oh my.
"fetid exhumation"--Love this.
"Do you plan to continue in absentia?"--Hahahaha!
"listing along on his warm waves"--This is great. It not only creates a tactile visual, it sets the mood.
"Famous. Last. Words."--Snort. I hope those are my last words.
"compelling cock"--Lots of excellent alliteration in the chapter, but this was one of my favorites.
"beyond grasping the base of his shaft before moaning into it like bad karaoke."--Bahahahaha! That's my kind of "Top 10."
"all she could execute were a few slow pumps of the velvety skin encasing his smoking hot rod."--I'm not sure what I like about this. It could be the word execute. Or it could be encasing or velvety. But I suspect it's the smoking hot rod, which made me laugh.
"howling clitoris"--Fuck! I love this.
"Finished? Did he mean dead?"--Snort! What a way to go.
"Was it some secret handshake from a clandestine fingering society?" --The Illuminaughty.
"bastion of invincibility."--He likes the cock karaoke too.
"trifecta of incredible orgasms to placate her"--I'm a triple crown winner myself.
"that she�d managed to pioneer the new sixty-one sex position, where one person does all the work and the other lies there like a fucking plank."--Damn straight. This needs to be a real thing. Sometimes concentration is out of the question.
"Finally lifting her face from where she�d been blow drying his groin" Hahahahaha! Excellent. (And blow-dry is hyphenated.)
"incontrovertibly commanding cock--I don't know if I liked the incontrovertible or the commanding cock alliteration best, but together they were excellent.
"And she would call back, her mouth full of a decidedly saliva-logged cock, �I�m still working on it!�"--Bwhahahaha!
"except apparently a sex God when he�s not wandering around the classroom sneering at people�s potions"--Snort, snort snort. The sneering is a bonus.
(On a one way journey to �death by orgasm.�--One-way is hyphenated.)
"she sent the other down to consult with his balls. Even they seemed ridiculously large. She hoped it didn�t mean she was going to cop a firehose of semen if it ever did finally arrive."--Consult was great, and obviously I loved "cop a firehose of semen."
"corpulent clit"--I love the word corpulent, but now you've made me love it even more. Alliteration at its finest.
"and when he attempted a pair, she wondered if in fact his entire arm had been recruited for the job."--Hahaha! Swelling makes everything more fun.
"It was less than ideal lubrication but it was all she could manage at short notice without dipping into her own twat which happened to be filled beyond capacity at that moment."--I'm sure he'd share. Sharing is caring. (There should be a comma between twat and which.)
"You are mine, Professor of Finger Fucking."--I got my Masters in Finger Fucking. It's a double-penetration major.
"gratuitous gushes"--Love this. And I loved how he suddenly whipped out the narrative and cock-slapped her in the face with it. Sneaky word pimp.
Noooooo, don't go, Snape! Come back! Does he really have a meeting or is he just running away? What the fuck! How much longer until we find out why he blew up the book? I'm dying here.
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From Rumpelyssa on May 26, 2016
WOW!!!! I read all ten chapters in one flippin go!!! ha ha, the idea of Snape and Hermione collaborating on a sex book ... hee hee - this was hot I found myself not being able to breathe at one point.
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From ANON - SnapesOnlyOne on May 26, 2016
Chapter 10: finally got around to reading this and glad I did! This is pretty much how I envisioned him. Fantastic writing so far, please update soon!
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