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Reviews for Dark Lord and Lady

By : LoverofDarkness
  • From Selera on February 12, 2007
    This is not a bad story. A bit hard to follow but the idea is quite good. I do hope you ignore the mean reviews and keep posting.
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  • From ANON - Atrumnex on January 01, 2007
    Really i will jus say it.
    Can i be ur beta?
    u really need one.
    The POV r very badly done.
    but u did try and thats worth every thing.
    so email me and i will see wat i can do for u.
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  • From xvshadowsqueenvx on December 29, 2006
    Okay. I'm a fan of Hermione stories. And this one has the potentional to be a good one. I feel compelled to tell you that the use of the english language is not high on your list of priorities. Your use of tenses and point-of-views is very interesting, but you need to work on the grammer aspect of it. If it from a pov then they speak in the first person. Example.. "You
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 28, 2006
    For the love of God stop writing this shit. How fucking old are you? My three year old nephew could write better than this.
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  • From ANON - anonymous on December 18, 2006
    This is possibly one of the worst pieces of shit I have ever had the misfortune to stumble upon. You should definitely use a beta reader. Not that they'd be able to do much with this... "story." This pairing has such potential, but this, really, is utter crap.

    Oh, by the way, if you don't want negative reviews, then you really shouldn't post it on the internet. Really. Don't. If you want to grow as a writer, then you should revel in criticism, not shun it. And you definitely have a lot to improve upon.

    Some suggestions:
    - no point of view shifts. Stick with one person [Hermione]. If you want to convey other perspectives, then I'd recommend the third person omniscient.
    - spell your character's names correctly: it's Lucius.
    - you need some sort of motivation/reasoning behind your character's actions. As it is now, nothing makes sense. Why does Hermione fall into the Dark Arts, reject her friends, etc. Just because it's fanfiction doesn't mean it doesn't have to make at least some sort of sense.
    - Pay more attention in your English/Grammar class. Please.

    I will, at least, give you props for trying.
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  • From ANON - AlexiDrake on December 13, 2006
    I want more of this frigging story! So write!
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  • From ANON - Ms.Moonie on December 10, 2006
    wow..please up date soon!!!keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - angel on December 10, 2006
    man poor mione ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - angelnight15 on December 09, 2006
    the way the fic is written is kinda odd, but i like it anyway...keep it up please!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 04, 2006
    just FYI to all the incompetent morons who don't already know this anon means anonymous you fucking idiots. It could be one person (Not likely considering how shitty this story is) or a different person for every single review that said (More than likely considering how shitty this story is)
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  • From ANON - angel on December 04, 2006
    im every sad to read that people are making you mad and if it makes you fell better i have read many many other authors that have gotten upset with anon ..and i just wish he would stop pissing off the author... i hope you do well in your classes and i cant wait in till you update next .. later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - amazed on December 04, 2006
    RIGHT ON ANON - POWA TO THE READERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - amazed on December 04, 2006
    yes i'm petty and im only here to flame... wwwwwwwwwwwwwwhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy?
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  • From ANON - kura on December 02, 2006
    well i like your story ^_^ and i do hope you update soon cous i love any pairing with voldie actualy ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 02, 2006
    awwwww poor little ickle idiot. did we hurt your ickle feelings? well too fucking bad. if you don't care then why the fuck are you posting author notes saying you don't care? maybe just maybe you should listen. your story is crap and you don't update other than state that you don't care that the readers don't like it.
    grow the fuck up.
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