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From ANON - soniab on February 08, 2009
NOOOOOOOOOO. No, no, no,no,no! You can not leave me there. You just can't be that cruel.

Loved this chapter. Oh my, I wonder whether Remus will come down after all, and what will Sirius do to Hermione after that stunt? I shudder to think.

Please inform me at the above email address when your next chapter will be up, and please, for the love of all things sacred and holy, do not leave me hanging like that again.

Thank you, that is all.

Love Sonia :)
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From WesleyY7 on February 04, 2009
First off, congratulations on 10,000 hits. *throws confetti* Second, I swear I posted my Chapter 20 review before reading Chapter 21, so any predictions or inference made just means I obsessively read this story to pick up on any clues you leave for us lowly readers. ;)

*"Kreacher's Night School" - LOL! So, what are you taking at Kreacher's Night School? Well, I'm majoring in elfin subliminal teaching with an empshasis on whispering. You?

*Sirius is so delusional in this chapter and has a very warped few on things.
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From WesleyY7 on February 04, 2009
You're right! I never did review Chapter 20. I totally thought I had posted it. Luckily, I do my reviews in notepad first just in case my browser freezes...which it has been lately. :( Since I tend to ramble, it's a safe bet for me. So, how about that Chapter 20?

*Already said this, but it must be said again. First part...so very sad. Sniff.

*I don't know if I've mentioned it before, but I'm really liking your chapter titles. I was a bit disappointed at first when you began to stray from the Cherries theme, but now that I realize how grand your story is, it had to be done.

*"The wrong end of a whip" Well, hello there Sirius, welcome to the land of the sane. Sooooo glad he made that connection. Someone commented that they wondered where Sirius stopped and Kreacher's influence begins. I've been wondering the same thing too. Also, how much did Azkaban come into play? Before he was in prison for so many years, what kind of sexual tastes did he have? Was he a vanilla kind of guy and Kreacher warped him into what he is now. Or was he interested in BDSM and pornography beforehand? I'm thinking his sexual appetite leaned more towards the wild side pre-whispering, but I look at what Kreacher has turned Hermione (and everyone else into) and wonder.

*Sirius continues to notice Ginny. Hmmm...interesting. I would love to see her again, but with less angst.

*Enter Severus Snape. Again, Sirius is a contradiction. He wants to protect Hermione and knows what she goes through with Bella, yet he desires (as he did so many chapter ago) watching Snape take an unwilling Hermione. (And I hope he stays away from Remus! The full moon talk worries me because I don't want her beloved DADA teacher taking her as a wolf.)

*Remus/Tonks - Now I'm seeing everything through Kreacher glasses! He's whispering to them and causing them problems.

*Twist! They think the Death Eaters have Hermione? And Snape knows, and Albus can guess, what she's going through! And they know she's pregnant! Ahhh! Too much! What happens if they try a rescue mission when she's right there in the basement?! What happens if Harry finds out and he goes off half-cocked and she's not even with Bella! Okay, I need to calm down because at first I was happy they thought they had found her, but now I'm realizing all the horrible ways this can turn out.

*Interesting how Snape isn't happy about the thought of being with Hermione. I thought he would be all for it, now I'm wondering how this is going to work out because I know they'll meet soon.

*Lots of stuff happening outside of the story. So that means the twins are still in school? And Dumbledore still at Hogwarts? Wow.

And now onto Chapter 21. And darn soniab for her review. I always pictured Hermione going into labor in the basement. For some reason, I never even thought of it happening with Bella & the DEs. Ack! Now I'm even more worried.

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From ANON - roxie on February 04, 2009
Chapter 22
I REALLY liked seeing Hermione fighting back!!! It's about time she realized what a disgsting pig Sirius is. Ok, so Sirius managed to win this little skirmish but still, she is getting back a little of her spark and that is a good thing. I wonder what it was about Remus that triggered this outburst? She didn't lose it when she had to sleep with Bella et al. Is there something special about Remus or was this just the last straw? I hope to see this continue, I like her when she fighting back and letting Sirius know she thinks he is a dog, which he is... literally. I'm wondering about Remus though. He seems to be aware now of the subliminal education Kreacher has been giving to all the members of the house. This in no way relieves Sirius of his responsibility for being a disgusting pig, but Kreacher does seem to be quite powerful. How can Remus be the only one aware of this? Do the others just not remember or is there something special about Remus?

It is quite interesting to see how jealous Sirius is of Severus. He had quite the mental rant going there for a bit. Issues much... I think so! But why would he have a fantasy of sharing a girl with a guy he is so threatened by? Yup, he has issues!

Um, one other thing... did you actually answer the question about the "Voldermort wins" storyline or did I miss it?
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From ANON - soniab on February 04, 2009
When Severus is talking to Albus about Hermione you have written this:
'Sirius briefly bowed his head, a look of scorn adorning his face, his voice harsh.
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From Elphaba on February 03, 2009
Please, Snape is intellegent. That whole Dog thing was a TOTAL hint! Ding Dong. Poor Mione I feel so bad for her
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From ANON - roxie on February 02, 2009
I liked seeing what was going on outside that cell. And showing that she hasn't been forgotten or abandoned is good. It seems that SS isn't too thrilled to be involved with this on any level, but will do what he has to just as he always does. The dog part was disgusting, but I guess if you have to have it in there, describing it 3rd person is the way to go.

So, if the actual timeline from the books isn't' holding true, what are we to assume is going on outside the cell? Is this headed into a "Voldemort wins" storyline? Since I know you have an outline you are working from, can I assume we are still headed towards a rescue and not a mudblood sexslave forever story? I am still hoping for a positive ish kind of ending since you hinted at it earlier, so if this changes please let me know.
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From WesleyY7 on February 01, 2009
I've only read the first part and I just wanted to say that I'm really worried about this chapter. (And chapter 21, thanks ever so!!) Hermione singing Happy Birthday to Ron while rubbing her belly and then ending the section on her whispering I love you. And all the worrying about the baby in between! I need to steel myself up because that just broke my heart. (The weird spam confirmation continues. My two words for this review: hard emotions.)
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From ANON - JordenK on January 31, 2009
I can't speak for everyone, but you're giving me more than a half-decent read. While I may not enjoy every aspect of this story, I am loving and thankful that you don't mind reviewers (not just me) who tell what they like and may not like.

I really enjoyed chapter 19. The flashback to the Ginny encounter was really good, and made me feel a bit less guilty as the girls didn't seem to be suffering. Pure physical sensation...followed by Hermione's guilt and thoughts, but still. Interesting how she thought to herself she loved Sirius, but really couldn't define the love. Sirius still is crazy. I'm wondering how much is him and how much is Kreacher. The passage about Lucius surprised me. He still raped her, yet wasn't evil about it. (Not that rape isn't evil.) Bella trying to get Lucius to bring Draco in to join the fun is kind of creepy. Me thinks she'd be the type to want to watch her precious nephew and the Mudblood, ordering them around. Wait a minute, maybe not so creepy after all. ;) And speaking of creepy..those dreams. Considering what Hermione is being put through, I couldn't even begin to guess what they represent. Yet another mystery added to my favorite story.
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From Elphaba on January 28, 2009
Ok What I meant ;) There has to be a way of getting out of Kreacher holding all the cards. Wow long chapter! I love that Hermione isn't so far gone that she is going blind with everything again.
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From ANON - soniab on January 28, 2009
Could the dreams represent perhaps the house elves at the LeStrange Manor? If not, then I haven't a clue...

I really like the fact that Hermione's thinking is so disjointed as that would more then likely be the way that someone in a similar situation would act and feel. I have heard from close friends who knew people who have been tortured that the night terrors are a regular occurance.

I do so wonder whether Hermione will actually carry this baby to term or whether it shall be premature because of all the abuse? And also what will Kreacher do to the little one once it is born? I shudder to think.

Love Sonia :)
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From WesleyY7 on January 26, 2009
I do believe I called you a tease in my last review. Name still holds since this was posted on a Monday morning and I couldn't read it until I got home. *sigh*

*Comments on comments - "the scat stuff never would have been added if someone hadn't requested it" Damn you, user 1505627! The bathroom stuff is all your fault! "Who else, do you suppose, has he been teaching?" Okay, bad mental image of Kreacher doing is nightly teachings with Dumbledore or Moody. Bad brain, bad! (Is it okay to comment on an author's comments to other reviewers? Hmmm.) I did notice the 't' in my name, but no worries. I was dumb enough to leave out an 'a' years ago, so I'm a Wes instead of a Weasley. Having read a lot of HP fic, I've seen wands used in a variety of ways, especially femmeslash. Although Draco seems to be successful with a vibrating charm in a number of stories too.

*Onto the fic. (I love your long chapters.) Time sure is flying by. It's been a month since Ginny, and now almost two months pass in this chapter. Should I really begin worrying about the baby now?

*I love your writing style. I hope I've said that before. It's unique and interesting. You don't jump back and forth from characters' points of view within the same scene. (Huge pet peeve of mine! I've seen POV changes in the same paragraph!) It's always a nice little treat that you once your POV changes, not only do you continue with whatever's happening, but we get the thoughts and feelings of what's happened before. I liked how you did that the first night Kreacher and Sirius came into her room. I think you did it too when Ron was down in the basement. And here you have Hermione, while worried about Ginny (the "younger" woman by a year!), she flashes back to their time together and we get more detail about something that was only mentioned. We get a great, new sexy scene and Hermione gets to reflect on her conflicting feelings. Hope all that made sense. I just find it neat. I'm sure there's a fancier literary word for it, but there you go. Neat.

*Okay, okay, I know Kreacher is the real villian here. I do. However, despite what the elf is doing, I still continue to be angry with Sirius. Threatening Hermione. Imperiusing the girls *without* prompting from Kreacher. Refusing to teach her to protect her mind because he doesn't want to let her go. (This is surprising since he worries that she isn't there to inspire Harry. A rare time when he chooses his wants over his Godson's needs.)

*Ginny crying and wanting her mum? That is too sad.

*Interesting to see events from OotP woven in here. That's right, Hermione isn't there to get an interview with Rita. Won't that mean most people don't know the true story thus not supporting Harry? The discussion of Occlumency and Legilimency...just a discussion or something more. Hmmmm...I may have some theories, but I have to think about them for a bit. (Of course, it could be nothing and you're thinking that I'm crazy!)

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From ANON - roxie on January 26, 2009
Ok, the dreams... 1st a question, is the creaking scene a dream or did someone actually come in her room? I can actually see that happening since these people are just plain evin an would do that to mess with her.

The night terrors/ dream scene where she is in the dark, can't see anything and is hiding from the green monster, the darkness I think represents her feelings of hopelessnes and abandonment. She doesn't see an escape (I kind of agree with that part, I don't see an escape either, I'm really hoping you have one in mind for her though.) from her current situation and believes everyone is tricking her, which they are.

I think the green monster represents something about herself that she finds scary or ugly, which could be the part of her that likes some of the treatment she recieves. She doesn't like all of it, but she likes enough of it that she is wondering what kind of person that makes her. It also could be the repressed feelings and emotions about her current situation, she talked about them in the beginning of the chapter. Or it could be the baby, dreams are so subjective.

I don't know if the color green means anything in this situation...ok ok, I took a class on this once, sorry for showing off.

Overall, a MUCH better chapter than the last one. I am still anxious to see SS enter the picture. I am kinda hoping that he is more like Mr. Malfoy and is less brutal than she expects him to be. I don't think he could be any worse than those psycho Death Eaters she is already with. But please don't try to prove me wrong on this... ok I take it back. He could be worse.

You said earlier that we were going to see some of these people get their's and get taught a lesson. Is that coming anytime soon? I know Sirius has already gotten slapped down some since he can't really do what he wants to with her, but is Kreacher gonna get his? He is just disgusting! I want his head mounted on the wall, nope that is too good for him. Make him into a potion ingredient for a really nasty potion and kill the death eaters with it.... oh well. Just a thought.
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From WesleyY7 on January 21, 2009
So many twists and turns in Chapter 18! I don't even know where to start, you cruel, cruel woman! (We love it, though!)

*The baby is Ron's! When you threw in that "maybe you'll get lucky and sire a brat" all those chatpers ago, this crossed my mind, but then I dismissed it. Poor, poor Hermione. Carrying the baby of the boy she loves (hear that, Sirius!) while be held captive. And a girl. That made me shiver in a really bad way. All I can think of is you going super beyond dark, Hermione never getting out, and the girl being raised as another slave. Sirius continues with the crazy. You're not that old, go find a woman of your own to complete your precious blood line. And stay away from the baby's milk! She'll need more than few days' worth. (Well, he doesn't have to stay all the way away of course.)

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From ANON - soniab on January 21, 2009
So many things to take in in this chapter.

Firstly there is the fact that Hermione's baby is Ron's. What? Didn't really see that one coming. Next there is the fact that Ginny was taken, I kind of expected that, but not the point of Ron taking Ginny. I still feel for Hermione, having to be taken daily to Bella's house of horrors can't be good for ones self imagine. I also wonder what will happen when she had the child. If it is indeed Ron's, what will Kreacher do to it?

Wonderful chapter.

Love Sonia :)
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